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Leaving is what I do best

My soul is cracking under pressure. As I’m forcing back the cries.
I cough these pills up one by one, glitter vomit, and endless lies.
You don’t even see me.  I’m the whisper in the wind.
A shallow grave dug too deep, with one foot already in.

So tell me can you hear me. Cause there was no response to those three words,
I buried my heart into your hands, now it’s stomped into the floor.
Who are we kidding, we were never meant to be.
And even though you keep me terrified, I still don’t want to leave.

Now this is the fourth night, where your still completely awake,
These drugs are your release, but the nightmare I can’t escape.
You keep telling me your done, that this is the last time.
I’ve cleaned myself up the best I can;  but you won’t even try.

I can only take so much, my addictions are still pending,
Soon I’ll be right back in that cycle, where death is the only ending.
But I don’t want to be that way, it’s like freedom in a cage,
So I have to let you go. I’ll never get better this way.

It’s like the calm before the storm, before everything gets fucked up.
Before I despise everything about you, before I hate what I’ve become.
Because you were seconds from disaster, and I was minutes from my death.
But everything will be ok now……
                                                        Leaving is what I do best.

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  • dutch2lips gold member
    July 23
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    i enjoyed reading this, you have insight and know how to pen them down, thank you for entering


  • Blue-Rose Beauty
    July 15
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    So descriptive and sad. That was a nice poem.

    Favorite lines:

    I can only take so much, my addictions are still pending,
    Soon I’ll be right back in that cycle, where death is the only ending.
    But I don’t want to be that way, it’s like freedom in a cage,

    The freedom in a cage line was the best.

    Overall score: 7/10

    Nice write and thanks for entering.


  • Midnite-Rae
    July 14

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    The emotion in this poem was very strong.
    It was fantastic.
    The flow was wonderful and I liked the rhyme as well.
    This was sad, but I very much enjoyed reading this.
    The ending is perfect.
    You did an awesome job with this poem.
    Keep on writing!


  • Mokashi Senyu
    July 7

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    Amazing!!

    I love it.
    The emotion just blew me away, and i cried while reading it. It just says so much, and everyone who reads this should love it too.

    Stay golden, stay strong.


  • Antebellum
    July 5
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    'It’s like the calm before the storm, before everything gets fucked up.
    Before I despise everything about you, before I hate what I’ve become.
    Because you were seconds from disaster, and I was minutes from my death.
    But everything will be ok now……
    Leavings what I do best.'




    I love this entire ending!!
    A brillant write, that I believe so many can relate to.

    Only thing I noticed that might make this a more powerful ending is if it was
    "Leaving is what I do best."

    Sometimes that little bit can make a big difference.


  • Antebellum
    July 5

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    Good luck

    &&

    thanks so much for entering.

    [If you make it to the finalists I'll leave a better comment.]


  • L.Jay
    June 25
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    wow this was so powerful great write!

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