My soul is cracking under pressure. As I’m forcing back the cries.
I cough these pills up one by one, glitter vomit, and endless lies.
You don’t even see me. I’m the whisper in the wind.
A shallow grave dug too deep, with one foot already in.
So tell me can you hear me. Cause there was no response to those three words,
I buried my heart into your hands, now it’s stomped into the floor.
Who are we kidding, we were never meant to be.
And even though you keep me terrified, I still don’t want to leave.
Now this is the fourth night, where your still completely awake,
These drugs are your release, but the nightmare I can’t escape.
You keep telling me your done, that this is the last time.
I’ve cleaned myself up the best I can; but you won’t even try.
I can only take so much, my addictions are still pending,
Soon I’ll be right back in that cycle, where death is the only ending.
But I don’t want to be that way, it’s like freedom in a cage,
So I have to let you go. I’ll never get better this way.
It’s like the calm before the storm, before everything gets fucked up.
Before I despise everything about you, before I hate what I’ve become.
Because you were seconds from disaster, and I was minutes from my death.
But everything will be ok now……
Leaving is what I do best.
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Comments
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i enjoyed reading this, you have insight and know how to pen them down, thank you for entering

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So descriptive and sad. That was a nice poem.
Favorite lines:
I can only take so much, my addictions are still pending,
Soon I’ll be right back in that cycle, where death is the only ending.
But I don’t want to be that way, it’s like freedom in a cage,
The freedom in a cage line was the best.
Overall score: 7/10
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The emotion in this poem was very strong.
It was fantastic.
The flow was wonderful and I liked the rhyme as well.
This was sad, but I very much enjoyed reading this.
The ending is perfect.
You did an awesome job with this poem.
Keep on writing!

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Amazing!!
I love it.
The emotion just blew me away, and i cried while reading it. It just says so much, and everyone who reads this should love it too.
Stay golden, stay strong.

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'It’s like the calm before the storm, before everything gets fucked up.
Before I despise everything about you, before I hate what I’ve become.
Because you were seconds from disaster, and I was minutes from my death.
But everything will be ok now……
Leavings what I do best.'
I love this entire ending!!
A brillant write, that I believe so many can relate to.
Only thing I noticed that might make this a more powerful ending is if it was
"Leaving is what I do best."
Sometimes that little bit can make a big difference.
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Good luck
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thanks so much for entering.
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wow this was so powerful great write!


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