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Schindler's List

"for the dead and the living, we must bear witness."

- Elie Wiesel

 

I see the aching words of Elie Wiesel

born in black and white: the metal eyes
of Nazi Germany on Israel,
the numbered numberless, the animalized
who once were men -- whose children will not know
the innocence of childhood again --

and still, the falling ash, the burning snow,
the deep, remorseless appetite of sin.
And there am I, entirely, one of them,
lost in the heavy silence of the room
without the power to conquer or condemn
the tyranny -- with only the power to loom.
Too many think of hell and live in fear
of death, and never know that hell was here.

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  • Adamastor gold member
    2 days ago
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    Good Topic.

    Was you educated in Harvard? You seem such a smart fellow to come up with a poem this good. The style actually reminds me of a poem called "Mental Cases" by Wildfred Owen, you may be familiar with his work. Anyway, as I said to other people, I can only give score of one for now, since I'm new and can't afford to give 3, otherwise I wouldn't be able to score other people's. Thanks.


  • poetryality silver member
    November 21
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    I have yet to read the novel, "Night" but feel the intensity that the writer left in your spirit. The Jewish Holocaust is one of our greatest atrocities. Your imagery shares with the reader how gaud-awful it must have been. My heart still mourns for;

    "the numbered numberless, the animalized
    who once were men -- whose children will not know
    the innocence of childhood again --"


    A poignant, real, raw, and informative work of poetry here dear poet. I have to get this book. You have sparked my interest with this poem, and the feelings I am left sitting here with in my heart.


    Much Love & Respect ♥

    Renee


  • tidoubleguher
    November 19
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    I read "Night" for a literature class; one of the most amazing books that I've read ina long time. And this poem was amazing as well. Very stunning work.

  • Lord Gegishov
    November 7
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    This is absolutely incredible. I know not what else to say.


  • Titus gold member
    October 29
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    A really, really good selections of phrasing. Interesting subject matter.


  • Tzipora
    October 12
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    amazing write.


  • Lencio Rodrigues
    September 27

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    A truly deep and brilliant write on a subject we can just go on and on. It is sad. Very powerful ending and so true, it must have been worst than hell for those who live through it. You have brought all the effects to so much life, a very visual write. Thanks for sharing your talent.

    Lencio

  • Purrsanthema
    August 26
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    Please write more sonnets! You have SO much to say, and so much gift!

  • In my opinion the most talented of poets couldn't produce better than your last two lines. I love reading your work so much.


  • hawkeslake gold member
    August 5
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    Just had to read it again. Don't give me any stars -- I wish I could give them all to you! This so powerful. I am looking forward to more from you. Lita

  • Deep thought provoking piece.
    Well penned.

    Thanks for sharing

    Passions


  • Babes-Dunn
    July 17
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    This ia amazing- I am to blown away to think of a better way to put it


  • albymyheart gold member
    July 12
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    Excellent write...Alby

  • em... just wanted to read it again.

  • Line 9...brilliant

    Sometimes we encounter something that makes the past real, almost as though we are living it ourselves. This sonnet is a stunning communication of that experience.
    But there are hints of all sorts of other things. It makes this piece so intriguing. It could be read so many different ways.

    Imagery is awesome, and line 9 and the ending couplet really bring this home.

    There were two main spots that threw me off a little, and my suggestion is that it might help the flow if you correct the fragments in lines 7-8 and in line 12. Also, the transition from 12 to 13-- the jump from introspection to everyone in the world is a little sudden--

    I really can't wait to see what you do with this. It's really powerful.

    Corey poems never disappoint. ever

    ~Jocelyn


    • Corey Harvard gold member
      August 24
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      Hey Jocelyn,

      I've tried to fix the fragments by using dashes. Consequently, lines 1-8 work as one long sentence. I might be okay with this though. Everything past the colon in line 2 is supposed to dive into the imagery/content of Schindler's List.

      Thanks again for the input; it was very useful.

      Cheers,
      Corey


  • MolliPaige silver member
    July 2
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    Subject Surreal...

    What a vulnerable subject...and you capture some of the anguish of that time.
    Your last two lines:
    "Too many think of hell and live in fear of death,
    and never know that hell was here."
    So true--How easily we forget the past.
    The first line, makes this piece a REALITY to the reader, right away.
    Fortunate to have stumbled on this humbling write.
    Thank you,
    M


  • My Nemesis
    June 29

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    Always in awe of your writing. This poem takes me to many places, has me thinking of many things. The children mentioned - those of the concentration camps and those of the Nazi's...both lost their innocence. Which one are you part of?, the Jew's in the concentration camps, or the Nazi overlords. How many of the Germans working the camps looked away, felt helpless - powerless to change what was happening. Hell was here, true. It was, and has been many times since.


  • BlueNote27
    June 26

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    Read this last night, and came back to it this morning.

    Beautiful imagery throughout, great message, and astonishing final lines.

    Favorite snatches: numbered numberless (brilliant), burning snow (haunting), the power to conquer or condemn.

    The first line is great as it sets a perfect context, and while the rest of the first half of the poem fleshes out said context, it doesn't quite have the flow of the second half. This ends so strong and has such great potential in the first half... but for some reason, it feels like the gears are catching a bit before it jumps up and takes off.

    I can't wait to see this after tweaking. Kudos.

    • Thanks for the input, John .

      Comically, I'm happiest about the flow in the first half of the poem. It's harder pull away from full sentence rhyming (which explains why I ended up taking the easier road toward the end of the poem ) but I've come to prefer it. There's something about the enjambments that make their own dynamics (e.g. my favorite lines in this one are the first three, largely for: "the metal eyes of Nazi Germany on Israel"). It might be an acquired taste; I used to loathe contemporary verse for this very reason. Now I find it more artistically appealing.


      • BlueNote27
        June 26
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        Hah! That's actually what I was referring to... just a matter of taste then.


  • hawkeslake gold member
    June 25

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    You've born witness well, Sir Poet. A very fine work. The last two lines should be written in stone. Lita

  • ecrivain01
    June 25
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    Magnifique! Bravo.

    I like it better every time I read it.

    What a strange world we live in. Horrors seem to crop up constantly, and most people go right on with their petty little projects and aspirations and never think about the fact that we are always poised on the brink of a precipice, and could fall off at any time.


  • SpydurPoet gold member
    June 25

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    Whoa. That was powerful and amazing. You did such a fantastic job with this.
    Write on.
    ~*~SP~*~


  • duana
    June 25

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    without the power to conquer or condemn
    the tyranny. With only the power to loom.

    wow that is a powerful thought- and very astute observation about why injustice continues.

    Love the last lines too- never knowing that hell is here...

    amazing poem. One of your best in it's power and impact.

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