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Stranger on the shore

As silken sands sooth tired feet
I stand where earth and waters meet
As heart and soul rejuvinate
I calmly stand and contemplate.

I step into the turquoise sea
To wash away the old debris
Then build myself a harbour wall
As time and tide both rise and fall.

Whilst swimming deep with the waves
I see the last of Neptunes graves
Where mermaids shimmer in the deep
and times gone by are fast asleep.

I see a stranger on the shore
Whose life is changed for evermore
Upturned reflections on the ground
For I was lost but now I'm found.



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  • Andre ben-YEHU
    June 30

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    Wise-Wonderful-Profound...


    I like the singing of "Stranger on the shore".

    In respect and admiration

    Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU


  • malmadre gold member
    June 29
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    A gentle poem that has the rhythm of the incoming surf, touching our hearts as soothingly as the surf touching our feet. The oceans beaches are the place to contemplate life and to find solutions to our problems, I like the closing "for I was lost but now I'm found" reminding me of amazing grace. A wonderful poem!


  • killa
    June 27
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    great work

    mushroom samurai was right,this did feel classicl and i hope to read more like this.


  • Overcast
    June 27
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    Beautiful!


  • Mushroom Samurai
    June 27

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    Very nice rhyme. I really enjoyed reading it. It has a sort of classical feel to it, in my opinion, and it sounds absolutely beautiful when reading aloud.

  • Bob Fox
    June 27

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    Now

    Poet I just love this. Light and lovely. And oh the perfect rhyme. A lost art indeed. One eccellent piece of poetry.

  • Willowbark
    June 27

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    Great job weaving those words together!
    Really enjoyed it... your words painted a beautiful picture. The shift between reality to fantasy and back again was inspiring.


  • twelfthknight silver member
    June 27
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    this is a lovely poem so beautiful and soothing, very well written x


  • cricketjeff gold member
    June 26

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    Softly metaphorical take on the prompt
    In your usual delicate meter and wonderful rhyme.

    Great stuff and good luck

    Jeff


  • fairy princess k
    June 25

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    kool

    Kool poem =) ,i clicked on 'random' and your poetry came up on the screen , k your style of writing is ASTONOSHINGLY UNIQUE , wow , wonderful k.
    i like the line ' Where mermaids shimmer in the deep' it gives the poem a bit of fantasy . k
    byyyyyyyyyye k


  • thejollytinker
    June 25

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    I open the page and there you are. The poem's immaculate. Big word for a country boy- trying to impress

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