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Voices

Your voice fills my dreams
A soothing lullaby guiding me farther
This world where safety reigns
And your voice echoes through every room
Each corridor and enchanted cave
Waterfalls and brooks no longer carry the sounds of water
But murmurs, a hint of you
The wind caresses me with your whispers
The radio stations play your song
And the sunlight warms my skin
As the sound of your voice warms my heart
Waking with a smile,
I am okay.

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  • Vhoori
    October 27

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    Wow, Sunshine. This makes me want to feel like that. Sometimes, I feel sort of like that when I'm with Chase... but it's not so much as peace that he makes me feel, the way that this poem makes me think of peace. It's more like a sunny rain, and my heart beats all crazy and stuff. But it's still really endearing and beautiful, just like you, sweetheart.


    Your Moonbeam


  • NeptunesMight
    July 4

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    great

    hmmm i love this all but the last line. seems as if the whole poem is you reassuring yourself your okay so it needent be said i guess. i particularly enjoyed the thought of flowing water changing to someones voice very vivid imagery.

    jack


  • Fulabeans
    July 1

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    Wow this is a great piece. So sweet and filled with love and longing. I really enjoyed the first two lines...really hit me hard.

    well Done,
    -Dusty-

  • dkilla001
    June 25

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    sorry, just not feeling it. good imagery and usage, but i just couldnt get into the mood that well.


  • demon bunny90
    June 25

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    wow awsome write, such a beautiful notion. not really a pursuing voice but a gentle omnipresent one that you welcome into yourself, great flow and beautiful wording. good write.

  • piccola silver member
    June 25

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    it's beautiful. You do quite well with free-verse. (when your nose burp heals) we need you to try some different forms like a rictameter. There so easy. Maybe even a limerick; they can get naughty and are a lot of fun.


  • Zombie Bad Boy gold member
    June 25

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    Its still not crap...

    I liked it then, and I like it now...
    It was never crap...

    Ima kick your butt.

  • Zombie Bad Boy gold member
    June 25
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    Rae Ray Rawr!

    It is not crap!
    Don't you ever call it that again...
    As far as it goes,
    Background...You caught me by
    surprise..
    Forgot to highlight it..
    And it was amazing.
    I like the images...
    I want voices
    Gimma voices!

    Amazing write sisseh!

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