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Hearing the Beat of Wings

Another prisoner, caught like me,
unable to fly, unable to flee.
My wings are gone, my eyes blind.
Hidden in a place no one will find.

Wings beating against the cage,
crying out in a desolate rage.

A contest entry

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  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    July 11

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    This is a great piece, I think it sums this up so nicely and with brevity here, well done. best to you in the contest

  • Benrutter2
    June 29

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    I can't figure out how to see the pic these words go with, but judging the text alone its very nicely written. The repetition of the sounds and structure was almost like a wail (in a good way of course). Also, not that it's of huge importance, but the title is one of the best i've ever heard.


  • Puppydog gold member
    June 25
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    WONDERFUL!!!!

    Your touching words go so beautifully with the pic and have such deep meaning. 's


  • AppleJuiceMemories gold member
    June 25
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    Awesome take on the prompt. I love this. ;D Good luck!


  • I Start With Hello
    June 25
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    Short, but sweet. Dark, yes. But very beautiful.

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