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To Breathe Stars

Look up at the sky, my friend, and tell me: where have the stars gone? Have they rejected the night, and abandoned their responsibilities? It appears that only the stars in my life have disappeared.

Throughout the years, I have always known that once the day retires for the night, the stars become visible. This comforting thought has made me accept the looming darkness so I can see my beautiful stars yet again each night. But why have they now been dimmed? What hope can I have without my stars shining vividly to remind me of my commitment to myself?

I invested my hope in the promise that they will always be there, and my sanity in the fact of their beauty. Why have I been forsaken? Tonight, there will be no stars, just like the past nights of this year, where my world has been engulfed by the darkness, and lost until morning.

Instead of accepting the absence of my stars, I have made the decision to recreate them. They will not be perfect, and they will not be as bright as they used to be, but they will be back, and my hope can be restored.

Tonight, in the midst of all my darkness, I will lay out on the grass and breathe the stars back into my life.






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  • Taste.In.Men
    February 13

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    Written in a verse-like way, this was interesting to read. The questions throughout the first, second, and third stanzas, trigger the reader to think and read deeper into the piece. Well written.

    Keep on Rockin,

    River


  • storiesuntold
    July 4, 2009

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    Wonderful write

    This is written very well and yes breath in the stars as we close our eyes and through our imagination make it sparkle make it shine for once we find this we shall forever have light upon our journey ahead

  • individuality gold member
    July 3, 2009

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    i am reading this ande all i can think of with stars is chasing the day which is my main name not individuality. and i am just sat here laughing at life


  • Beauty Of Silence
    June 27, 2009

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    AWWW! yay. this is such a beautiful write. you go girly

    i love the whole idea of this piece. GENIUS!


  • WednesdayJade
    June 25, 2009

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    =] very nice... very positive. I like it muchly and I reallllyyy hope that it works for you!
    x x x


  • Lostdreams
    June 25, 2009

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    wow, that is amazing. and yeah, it does apply to me big time. sometimes i feel like there is no hope in my life, but people tell me to have hope...that is hard. anyway, i love this poem, and i think it is great!
    ~Mimi~

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