There is a pain deep within my chest,
This stinging I cannot displace.
It's because my feelings can't be expressed,
Whenever we come face to face.
I shall scream to the heavens above
That look down with angel's glee,
That you are the only one I will love
From once begin to notice thee.
One day wedding bells shall chine
In melodious song of rhyme,
For you my dearest are finally mine
Till the end of the earth's time.
But hark, another maiden passes by,
Catching thy wandering eye.
Author notes
I chose the rhyme scheme of ABAB, CDCD, EFEF, GG. This is my very first sonnet, so I tried to follow the common traits of a sonnet very closely. The first quatrain expresses a problem, the second resolves this problem, the third is supposed to take this theme into reality and the line quatrain is supposed to conclude the piece with an abstract message. That's why mine ended with the man having a fickle love and falling for another,
Though, I am not a man I wrote in a man's point of view as most early English sonnets were written about a man's love for a woman.
Sorry if it is bad though, I just thought I'd give sonnet writing a go.
A contest entry
- Sonnets! by Brandon Ashley.
518 points, ended August 1, 18 entries
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This was actually really good, I enjoyed the flow of it and the point of view. Good luck in the contest!
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