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Pills, Thrills, Chills, And Heartache



Every nerve ending tingles with anticipation every time I close my eyes,
Waiting for the safe warmth your arms bring...
Preparing for the sparks of light that blinds my eyes
and
Numbs my brain at your every touch,
Nothing matters here by your side,
The Past is just a fading light,
The future a story that together we'll write,
&&
As the day dawns from night,
I wake and the dream drifts away...

So Now,
I'm downing the pills
just
Chasing the Thrills
to
Kill the Chills
that
Take Over my Body
at
Every thought of you
but
I'm dreaming
This time...
It wont end in Heartache

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Title Prompt: Pills, Thrills, Chills, And Heartache

"The Crow & The Butterfly"

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  • pkoirish
    July 22

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    wonderfully dark

    its hopeful, beautiful, sad and dark with great imagery and raw emotion..
    i really enjoyed reading this poem....i can't say enough about it i could go on and on. its very intense with great flow...
    Patrick


  • ears2hearyou gold member
    July 6

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    definitely....it's raw and real....

    and the last line haunts...........

    but.......I'm dreaming
    This time.....it won't end in heartache.

    and
    damn....
    we all know too well
    it always does.

    way to write!
    ears/Seattle
    raw, real, and gritty!


  • ButILoveHer silver member
    July 5
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    Brilliant!!

    wow waht can i say but WOW
    very intense and gripping..
    loved every part ...


  • xeroabyss II
    June 26
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    How sweet it feels, even if it hurts in the morning.


  • Da Last Hope
    June 26

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    Every nerve ending tingles with anticipation every time I close my eyes,
    Waiting for the safe warmth your arms bring...
    Preparing for the sparks of light that blinds my eyes
    This was a very good description that you painted!


  • The.poet.of.hearts
    June 26
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    humz, right work but not right style
    I didn't like the style.. the style of writing should be revised.
    please, don't mind. it was just honest comment
    otherwise. it's great work
    by
    the poet of hearts and beautiful words

  • The.poet.of.hearts
    June 26

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    humz, right work but not right style
    I didn't like the style.. the style of writing should be revised.
    please, don't mind. it was just honest comment
    otherwise. it's great work
    by
    the poet of hearts and beautiful words

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