driving on this road
my eyes grow weary and tired
watching these distances
which never seem to end
instead grow longer and longer
forcing me to sleep
while i want to keep my eyes opened
thats just what i think i need
just then iam wide awake
a change takes over
in the lanes of distress
a bend in the road
brings a little excitment
challenges and victories
sometimes you have to loose
sometimes you have to accept
because life is a drive
sometimes itll run smooth
sometimes irritatingly long
sometimes it have bumps in the road
but you have to face them
to reach where you want
afterall your destintion
is far far away.........
A contest entry
- BEST KID POET OF 2009.. Five ROUNDS.. 5 THEMES!!! Kids from 4-15years ONLY!! by xXGoddessofPainXx.
400 points, ended July 14, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Honest opinion?
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Loved it very true and it made me think again about how I am going to "drive" my life.
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I can honestly tell you that the moment I pressed the link and opened the piece I knew I would love what I saw. The background told me that It was one of those beautiful and descriptive pieces. I like the tale you tell. The fact that life is a drive indeed and we should keep on going no matter how many bumps on the way. You did a wonderful job. Thanks for enterin
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Thank you so much ,these kind of comments encourage me to keep moving forward!
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Brilliant.
The middle and the end were very strong, and entertaining. I loved the title. In the first line you said "on" twice. I would only change the first line to read:
Driving on this road.
Other than that, it was perfect. That's just a suggestion. Great job. You've got great talent.
Evemauy
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goood and quite close to reality i like it
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I really loved the poem!Nice try
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