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nothing just wat i felt

i am having some sweet pain
inside my heart and brain
too much tense and confused
about every loss and gain

i want to cry more and more
to spit the pain in tears' core
to search the house of my heart
and to find a happiness door.

i want to be a cheering man
to give the world as happiness as i can
but i m unlucky so much that
i stuck in middle what i began.


i m becoming person so sad
besides,everything i wanted,i had
i think and it looks like
My lights of life is going to fade

most of people want to be mine
they really care for me i don't decline
but unlucky to be with the one
with whom i am so much fine......


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  • crawlingkingsnake
    September 30
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    nice poem, very unique, i look foward to reading more soon,


  • xXxBloodloverxXx
    June 26

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    cool
    This poem flows great. well i feel the same thing every one is not so lucky to find the person of their choice. i have a break up with my bf few months ago. it hurts really.