Sandy sea bottom
Beautiful shore
Left her ankles dry and bare as never before
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that sandy sea bottom brings all sorts of things up to the shoreline. i love how the waves roll them on up, so i can collect treasures, or watch the coquina (sp) clams dig into the wet sand. but this is more like when i have babysat before (ok... maybe other times, too) but in the sandbox when you want to make a little piece of ocean, but can't seem to. all you get is a puddle to stand in and no wave to come up and splash you wet.
for some reason, maybe it's just my life, but this is like a trip to the beach and having to leave when you really want to stay... the shore line, the sandy bottom felt by your feet, yet having to walk away into the dryness of sand in the dunes, as warm wind blows an semblance of wetness on your ankles dry. the dipping into life, wanting to stay where it feels so good and where beauty lay, but having to continue on, even through the driest of times... keeping in mind the sea's comfort as we walk barefoot through the dry, sandy times.
a few words say a whole lot here... well, to me. and obviously to mr blue skies there, too. i guess i need to take long breaks more often so you have something for me to comment on.
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How do you understand me like that??? Welcome back! It's like there are other aspects to the poem that exsisted and I wasn't even including when I wrote it and somehow you find those too?!
As for the last part. . .I will just have to write more poems if that will keep you from taking the breaks. . .
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So i read this this morning and thought about it ALL day and by the time i got here i almost had a 'going nowhere' comment lined up.. full of shockinly accurate interpretations and amazing insight.. but then i realized i am not that good.. lol...
but the only thing i can say along that line is the 'as never before' part... does that mean you are usually in the 'ocean?" and that this puddle is something different..
k.. back to MY comment. ha ha .. this is really great.. i would have to say this is up there with maybe the top 3 .. would have been number one had some of the other ones not had such an obvious emotioanal reaction cuz i knew what you were talking about.. in this case, i am left wondering... unless of course this poem is really about a puddle..
um... awesome awesome awesome!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
do it again
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haha... i see you still have your sense of humor *cough*
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Whoa, thanks Joe!!! Just the thought, and time, and the revealing of thought, and feeling, and realness that you put into this comment just makes me happy! Why is that?!
Thanks for the time/care . . .means so much to me
I can't believe you thought about my dinky poem all day! whoa!
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