Empty white walls
No life, personality, decoration
Staring back at me without eyes
Can't help but wonder what's inside
Or if it's all just empty
Beneath that paint I think
Yesterday
I heard a quiet heart trying to beat
"Mommy, is there death in there?"
-Andi
Author notes
Ok, all this was just me challenging myself to write about a white wall with nothing on it. I wrote it in under five minutes and this isn't my favorite though, considering the time, I do kind of admire it.
-Andi
Giovanna Corvis
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intriguing....liked this one
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Thank you and thank you for the clappies!!
-Andi
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Hmmm very nice. It's just a flow of thought which I love. I especially like the line "I can't help but wonder what's inside" it is an interesting thought that can be interpreted as looking at a bland person and wondering if there is anything deeper in them, or wondering what happened in a house. I often wonder what has happened in my house or in other people's homes in the past, perhaps a happy family lived there, or maybe there are some dark secrets hidden within the house. Good thoughts, nice write.
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Thank you very much!
I'm surprised. People are taking this poem so much more seriously than I did, lol!
-Andi
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well...
at first ididnt know if it wood be good but then u put "staring at me without eyes" and i think i actually said wow out loud! i dont why i liked that line so much i just do and the ending was amazing im still thinking about it actually....... i loved it!
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Thank you, like I said, I'm not all that fond of this one and so I'm kind of shocked to have JUST posted it and already have two people commented on it, lol
I will admit the beginning, well, sucked.
-Andi
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what does the end mean...is the death in there?
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Was there something alive inside or not was what it meant.
-Andi
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