i did whatever i could for you
i even did what had yet to be asked
i gave it all to you
you asked me why i am why i am
could it be because
you never loved me
i cut
i bleed
i feel
i cry
i wanna die
all because you never loved me
never really did
so I'm trying
trying to move on and forget
trying to forget
is like learning to tie your shoes
hard and complicated
then you finally get it rite
i got it rite
rite on with him
he was the same way
i did the same things
so i could feel something
next time maybe ill get killing myself rite
just like those old shoes
that i could never tie
A contest entry
- You spin me right round... by Miss Macabre.
530 points, ended June 24, 6 entries
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This isn't at all what I was looking for. And, if you had read my information in the contest, I asked that you used correct capitalization.
I'm sorry, but I'll have to remove this.
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I saw a lot of grammar mistakes, but otherwise this was a touching piece with strong tones of hopelessness and sorrow. Thank you for entering and good luck.
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