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Breathe With Me

You
From my dream
Made from water
Melting at the edges
I
Gave you the secret
I was calling you
As long as I could

Don't be silent
The blood will not cool down
My love is in it

Breathe
With me
Casting shadows
We are dancing under water
Breathe
With me
Maybe someday
We will meet again

There is nothing
Anymore
Except
Your breath
We
Will swim away
Where always is flowing
Water in the veins

Don't be silent
The blood will not cool down
My love is in it

Breathe
With me
Casting shadows
We are dancing under water
Breathe
With me
Maybe someday
We will meet again

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  • jonshaw
    July 5
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    I like it, Im not particularly qualified to advise but i think its good.


  • Findecano
    July 1

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    A rather intresting delve into another style of poetry that is the "Free form" a challenging write I would say, but somehow you've pulled something awesome out of the fray ^^ Congrats on a good write, and I hope to read more of your work ^_^


  • Papabear 4 Rosered
    June 24

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    open form, free verse, many poetry fans will say this is the most difficult way to write as it has no bounds. an entertaining foray into it. the emotions were evident and clear. all in all a good adventure in the written word. thank you poet and keep on writing.