My Dearest soul,
-I am writing all of this pain today in an overzealous effort to somehow erase
the emotions that seem to have taken root inside of my soul. Their sinuous
roots constrict almost incessantly. Squeezing ever so tightly...taking the very
essence of who I used to be away. I am left gasping for life sustaining breath,
only to be left panting in solemnly mute defeat. I want to weed my garden.
To unburden my soul from it's many heartaches and hardships. So many mistakes
made have left my garden overgrown with weeds of regret and self-loathing.
Someday I may find the right tools to pull out these spirit devouring,
life-absorbing parasitic invaders. Until then, I must look into the mirror
each morning, stare into the eyes of the only one who can save me,
and learn to love myself enough to begin the arduous journey into the dark,
dismal depths of my festering soul-
Gardening Beginning soon,
Gypsy
A contest entry
- tell me the pain/pleasure of your life. by black-phenoqu.
995 points, ended July 17, 69 entries
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{[I r i s h G y p s y R o s e]}
Comments
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This is very captivating and heartfelt. Loved those last three lines, you have done a remarkable job with this piece. Thank you so much for entering my contest.
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wow... this is moving.
i'm at a loss for words upon reading this.. regret is a heavy burden to bear/bare and i know even though i'm young how much it can eat away at a person. but the good thing to do is to just pray and stare at the person in the mirror and tell them everything will work out.
i promise it will work out.
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i like that it is in letter format, it's very original.
the wording is very nice, good job on this one. -
nice title
Awe it sucks......no I would be a idiot for saying that.the emotion is real that all that matters
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>.> There are four letters in this contest(including mine) and two of them totally pwn (not including mine). And this is so totally one of them. D:
There is no constructive critisizm that can be said for this piece. It is heart wrenching and absolutely lovely. I hope one day that your garden is fixed right and proper. --Correction. I know one day. Because you seem like a very strong individual.
Good luck, I'm sure you'll place high. I hope so, anyway. This is gold deserving.
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I feel your heartache through this write. There isn't any constructive criticism I can offer you...
THis is a very thought provoking piece,
I offer you some of the Lightness that I carry in my heart...
LIght a white candle,
and that's where you start.
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