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[ Dear Saloni, ]

 

Dear Saloni,

 

What do you think of the sky?


When I look to the sky I see heaven.

I do not see angels of white standing at pearly gates holding the book of Life.

I do not hear symphonies of choirs or trumpet music faintly playing the background. 

 

What I do see, however, is a fragile crystalline canvas, constellations of memories floating throughout and faces of the loved and lost.

I see colour streaming in pantone shades of navy, streaking across the night sky, leaving only deviations of what our naked eyes can view.

I see hearts of the beloved, flying south in their flocks of families,

protecting one another from the wrath of Winter's own Ice Queen.

I see galaxies of sugar coated stars, white light of a burning love causing them to

glisten in our optics and caramel black holes resembling the Milky Way. 

 

Optical illusions do indeed tickle my fancy.

 

 

When I lie in the cornfields, the

tall grass swaying beside me whispering lyrics of love and life, I stare at the sky,

telecommunicating with my friends from far away places, unknown and unsought to man,

I see her face. She is beaming, brighter than any of the burning balls, winking to me until they are extinguished and their lives complete.

She comforts me and I wake up to her presence, streaming in through my curtains and into my own eyes. She smiles.

 

Sometimes, I don't always see these things. Sometimes I just see a tired sky, restless and uneasy.

Doing it's routine job of not collapsing through gravity. Tinted with narcoleptic sighs, worn and petered-out,

stained by the heartless and littered with untruths about love and it's logic.

 

How I ache to see her face everyday...

 

Sincerely, 

M.

 

 

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  • Doing finalist top eight.

    This is staying in the finalists.

    Congrats!

  • Definalty a write to be proud of! Though I am unsure why this page is so stretched.
    Thank you for entering.
    Sophie


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    July 13

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    When I lie in the cornfields, the

    tall grass swaying beside me whispering lyrics of love and life, I stare at the sky,
    great lines
    I loved this piece
    Thank you and best wishes
    Julie

  • Matthew, you and your words. They make me so confused at times. Yet they spin into beautiful works of art. <3

  • M,

    one day you'll dance to musical notes composed by stars and natural satellites.


    i think the sky, keeps the world in balance, i think it is beautiful for not bending to force, and is a natural ceiling.

    love,
    loni

  • Thanks for fitting the alignment.

    <3

  • wow..never read anything like this before...superb imagery..wonderful choice of words..taking the reader from fantasy to reality...or may be vice versa
    beautiful write

  • Wow! That was amazing. That was so beautiful, I loved the imagery.

    Favorite line: I see hearts of the beloved, flying south in their flocks of families, protecting one another from the wrath of Winter's own Ice Queen. I see galaxies of sugar coated stars, white light of a burning love causing them to glisten in our optics and caramel black holes resembling the Milky Way.

    Areas that needs improvement: A bit hard to read

    Overall grade: 10

    Nice work!

    • Thanks, I don't know what took place with the alignment :S It was great all along...I'll try to fix it.


  • Curious LiLi
    June 25

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    Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww


  • Crazychook
    June 24

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    Gorgeous

    You paint such a picture with words son! You have such a talent, and I love everything you write. And this one... just blew me away. You're amazing!

  • wow i really liekd this and i liked the picture i dont know why though... amazing piece as always. really loved it. fantastic write!

  • whoa

    matt, you're poetry is like ice to me and it hits where it needs to. This si amazing and I just don't know what to say!

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