polaris -
I have dangled bare legs over
cloud edges, and wondered
what it would be like to
free-fall ten thousand years -
if I could pretend I was
flying, and if anyone would
catch me before I
broke.
I have clung to ropes of precipitation and
pulled myself over the atmosphere, where the rain
ends and proves to be
freshwater tears. they say
there is no air up there, yet
I have breathed the stuff of stars and found it
all my lungs would ever need.
I have swum in Martian oceans and
moon craters, burned my bones black
so space would not mind me;
I dived into the sun and
they called me a comet and
a shooting star; their wishes
settled in the creases of my palms and
I listened.
I have joined an unnamed constellation;
second to the right, and straight on till morning.
I nestle in the chest cavities of ursa major
and drink of the dipper's water. the world spins on its axis
to watch me;
it calls me
beautiful.
- neverland
Author notes
title is prompt.
I know the title doesn't fit. but somehow I got the poem from it, so whatever. and it's mandatory to use it as the title in the contest.
A contest entry
- Another options contest, oh my ♥ by ladybug..
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Silver trophy winner
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wow this is brilliant
well done!!
xx
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Wow. This is so beautiful. I have seen some authors that write like you, they make me very jealous, lol. You're very good at being able to write beauty and then have it appear before the readers eyes. My only question...how have you not won a gold trophy for this yet? It definitely deserves one
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I'm so glad you put this in to my contest. This is exactly what I like. Its definitely going through, I don't even have to think about that.
Your imigery is beautiful, the words you use ar powerful, and they make the poem what it is.
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Have you ever read a poem that you understand yet don't quite understand, and even so love it. It was one of those ocations. I loved it. It made me think. Good work. It doesn't matter if i'm not sure what it's about! briliant. keep up the good work.
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this is so incredible.
'I swung on ropes of rain'
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that is just the most brilliant metaphor ever. I love it.
never stop writing <3
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I think the title is fine. It is a prompt after all you write where it takes you. I don't know how to say much about this except I understand it and I'm speachless. -
uh. wow much?
this is bookmarked.
its awesome.
beautiful language, impressive vocabulary and all the rest. mind-blowing. gorgeous.
xx
swim.x
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Holy wow. This is absolutely...amazing. I don't care that the title doesn't fit; the poem you produced from being inspired by it is too beautiful to care.
The imagery you used is just stunning & metaphor, magnificent. Thank you very much for sharing.
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