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Thoughts of Him

  My deeepest thoughts, my inner fears. They crash me now. I start to tear. I stab my heart, we watch it bleed. All hope is gone, I start to scream. I'm winning none, losing all. I shread my feelings, you now surrender me.

  i  die, i live, i cut, i scream. I look around these four walls. Just waiting to be seen. If tomorrow I were to die would it matter at all to you? would the note on my hand stained with blood be read? would you listen to the words? would you shed a tear? just one at all? would you finally understand, you drove me to this all? 

  So now I'm in the mental place and now I mean nothing to you. Nothing to this world. I'm someone never seen, someone never missed. Now I'm no one at all. Why did you mess my life up so bad? Are you trying to be like my fucked up dad? He's an abusive fag. But aren't these tears over someone I never really had.

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Really good. The anger and hurt is well put in this poem and you have a knack for creative and metaphorically lyric. looks great!

  • This is really deep, dark and full of angst and strong emotions! I wonder what the music to accompany these lyrics would sound like? My favourite part: "I stab my heart, we watch it bleed." What a great metaphor! I'm guessing you sing what you write? If so, got anything on YouTube?

    Nicely done,

    David.