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As Moist As Any Dawn

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Summer's afternoon, soft as rose petals,

throws light across her eyes; cool blue jewels,

and conversation sparkles while the night,

inches quietly towards our respite.

Tomorrow's contemplation shall not sigh

as here we capture the present's wild cry,

fold it into warm sheets of harmony,

then wander gorgeous laughter, bold and free.

 

Soon, we'll leave behind this romantic place,

but first, I feel the urge to kiss her face,

such lips, as moist as any blossomed dawn,

speak silently while we enjoy this lawn.

And wondrous time's fine flow sets us aglow,

cheese and wine devoured, it's time to go,

a beautiful day has been bright with love,

we've breathed in scents whilst Heaven danced above.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Rhythm Child
    November 14
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    dear oh dear


  • The kiss is Thirst gold member
    October 27
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  • AutumnAshe
    October 8
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    The imagery in the poem is fantastic. It was used so well I can almost imagine this as coming from my own memory. Beautiful.


  • Rick Weston silver member
    October 7
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    a feast of poetry, wine and love - an inspiring picnic indeed and a treat to read.

    lovely work.

  • Pogo7747
    September 17
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    Nice images

    You paint words well. The images are very nicely done.


  • spideracer
    September 16

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    Picnic on a lazy sunday afternoon, that's the imagery you've put in my head after reading this lovely poem. You don't often rhyme from what I've read, but when you do, you do it with such ease. This poem has life, desire for the simple things in life. Well done yet again, impressive imagery to leave one spellbound. Your two gold trophy wins so far speaks for itself how good this poem is. Take care and I wish you all the best in your future endeavours.


  • Room without doors gold member
    September 16

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    Outstanding

    What impresses me most about this poem is the clarity of the imagery. The rhyme is well chosen and adds to the effect of the poem. Great to see you writing in rhyme. Congratulations on the trophys.

  • Moonlit dusk
    September 16

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    'Summer's afternoon, soft as rose petals,
    throws light across her eyes; cool blue jewels,
    and conversation sparkles while the night,
    inches quietly towards our respite.'
    I love the imagery and metaphors you use in this first few lines. You really capture the imagination and then carry it forward through the rest of the poem.
    A fantastic read.
    Good luck in the contest.

  • Hannah-Louise
    September 16

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    Beautiful

    This really tugged at my heart-strings. Maybe it's because I am a girl, but I find this incredibly romantic. If a guy wrote something like this for me, I would melt.
    I would not change a single line of this; To me, it's perfect.


  • second-born
    September 16

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    this is such a lovely piece!!! great imagery and romance is definitely portray with vividness and sincerity...thank you for sharing this poem...


  • GuiltedShadow gold member
    September 16
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    Such romantic imagery. Soft with an even flow. This is very soothing to the heart.

  • The kiss is Thirst gold member
    September 15
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    Superb. An inspiration A dream poem of love and smiles xxx


  • laura0757 gold member
    September 15

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    this was beautiful. so was the way you commented on my little poem, mine pales in comparison, I enjoyed it very much, I can tell you have a poetic flare and I dont know much but I do know what I like or dont and i liked this. love another endless topic,, with the same song..........


  • FloridaGatorQueen silver member
    September 12
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    This is very beautifully written. I could feel the love in these words. I enjoyed the read!!! Thank you for entering my contest


  • ccawley gold member
    September 11

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    Good!

    "we've breathed in scents whilst heaven danced above"...
    very crystal clear romantic....like a drink of water line.


  • rite
    August 29

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    Sometimes the challenge to mess with minds, without people knowing they have been messed with, is just to powerful to resist. Imagine what such a thing could do to the messer's mind if they actually dominated the world. I guess it takes place every day. Still I wonder which is better: knowing it happens or not being aware of it. Perhaps we should give it a few more tries before we decide upon our choice Thanks for creating and sharing. Take care.


  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    August 27

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    love every single word,
    so very beautiful,
    a love poem, of all love poems.
    my favorite part was the whole thing.
    i so enjoy your poetry.
    you are truly one of the best.

    loveandblessings2u & yours always
    Joyce

  • SpinnerAndTheHawk
    August 27
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    Absolutely lovely
    Paints a picture of absolute bliss and harmony
    Beautiful,


  • mgmc gold member
    August 18

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    A Definite Love Poem

    Very romantic and written with imagery that very well evokes that feeling. I particularly like the phrases, "wander gorgeous laughter, bold and free," and "as moist as any blossomed dawn." Also "Heaven danced above!". Congratulations!


  • Sheilasbabygal4life gold member
    August 17
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    Good luck! Thanks for entering!!~


  • 2lullabyhaven
    August 16

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    Thank you for this touching entry...it brought back such marvelous memories that makes my eyes water..


  • Deceits Tears silver member
    August 14

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    Your writes are always thought provoking in many ways, Its always a privledge visiting you my friend
    WELL DONE !!


  • FloridaGatorQueen silver member
    August 5

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    This is beautifully written. It was full of love and romance. It brought a smile to my face. I enjoyed the read!!! Thank you for entering my contest.


  • Antebellum
    August 3
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    Beautiful imagery.
    thank you so much for taking the time to enter.
    best of luck.


  • Net
    August 2
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    Beautiful romantic images

    Excellent yet again! It is easy to see why so many people love you on here.


  • Dryad Enya
    July 29

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    "It is not a place that makes it romantic, it is the thought of making love that burns a desire to belive it is romantic" is my new quote [I did make it up just now] but we can not egnor the obviouse delight taken from this world, any where with open sky and grass should be seen as a Heaven, we can not say what is and what is not if we have not been in the wrong place before hand. I'm speeking in riddles i fear so i shall leave you with a simplisitc answer to your poem.

    Brillaint. Metaphores are coming back with style, so many times you read them and they make no sense but you have captured what we love. Finding this is like catching smoke with my bare hands, rare nearly impossible yet i achived it.

    Well done and best of lick in the contests,
    Gorecki.


  • Laughing at you
    July 29
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    great stuff

    again the master strikes.........at this moment in time i am exhausted, been up all night,,,,but i know that when i read this again i will find more and more each time.......


  • Mark Harrap
    July 29
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    great work

    sunshine,wine and ya fav lady,how could you not write about it ;0)


  • HeavenonEarth
    July 29

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    Excellent

    You leave us with the divine imagery of what may come
    and has arrived.
    "Tomorrow's contemplation shall not sigh
    as here we capture the present's wild cry,
    fold it into warm sheets of harmony,
    then wander gorgeous laughter, bold and free"

    Bellismo! I want to be wrapped in sheets of harmony..what a image to conjure up!
    The ending is just sweetness of this dessert. Your poetry is always beautiful I need not go into this..I love what you evoke in my mind and the feeling that evolves from it.
    All the best dear friend,
    ~Joy


  • forsaken-phoenix
    July 24

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    beautiful imagery and great step-by-step descriptions, explaining how a simple day of simple things with someone you love can turn into so much more I like this piece a lot, thank you for sharing. and thank you for commenting on my work as well, its always appreciated

  • LovingPhoenix
    July 24
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    Quite romantic, this piece! Ah, the days of sweet romance are to be cherished! This quite beautiful! Wonderful imagery, as always!


  • ShaShay
    July 22

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    Beautiful....I am constantly amazed at your range of ability. This is one of the softer, more loving poems I've read of your's. Although some are loving with the words being left to the readers take.
    "Summer's afternoon, soft as rose petals,....
    we've breathed in scents whilst Heaven danced above."
    The first and last lines tied together well. They could be a write unto themselves.
    I truly enjoyed this write. No changes needed, IMHO. Best wishes in the contest.
    Sharon


  • hellzkitkat420
    July 21
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    perfect...i could feel the love
    good luck


  • Gwenevere
    July 19

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    A gently summery poem that leaves the reader feeling soooooo!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! good .Well done, Ros


  • HereComesTheSun
    July 17

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    Positive: you do a stunning job expressing and explaining this situation.

    Fav Line:


    Summer's afternoon, soft as rose petals,

    throws light across her eyes; cool blue jewels,

    and conversation sparkles while the night,

    inches quietly towards our respite.

    Tomorrow's contemplation shall not sigh

    as here we capture the present's wild cry,

    fold it into warm sheets of harmony,

    then wander gorgeous laughter, bold and free.
    imagery was quite stunning

    Negative: none

    suggestions: none

    thanks for entering


  • ProtectedMemory
    July 16

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    This is really good! It is touching and emotional and I love your focus. Great Job & Keep up the amazing work! This is truly phenomenal and fits the contest you have entered perfectly. ProtectedMem


  • Vernal Bloom
    July 16

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    Yes of course I loved it, it was really a nice one, wrapped with good romance, thanks for the link and today-smile


  • sidewinder silver member
    July 15

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    words touching within those silences that's held in romance!

    well done my friend!
    Bill
    keep penning on one stroke at a time!








  • Coathanger
    July 14
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    If only every day was like this. An enjoyable read.


  • Eugenia Butler
    July 13

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    Nice romantic images. A "splendor in the grass", like Natolie Woods would do. I must say that your imagery makes the reader feel the day of lovers


  • Lencio Rodrigues
    July 13
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    Hi, its been some time I have read some real good poetry, and I am glad I clicked on this one. What I liked most in this write is the sense of calmness, the atmosphere you speak of your love, a very passionate feel to each line. Love the reference of cool blue jewels, and certainly the silent conversation on the lawn! Wow!

    Love and light,
    Lencio


  • Lurie
    July 12
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    OHHHH YEAH!

    Loved this Ian! Very nice!!! Smooches to you!


  • condor gold member
    July 11

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    You have penned a wondrous piece here filled with so much love and tenderness. The romance in the words is undeniably unbeatable. Just beautiful indeed. I wish you the best in both contest and thank you so much for the read.


  • Sgt B
    July 11

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    Rythmic as always

    I always enjoy reading your metaphors and prose. Very well written and the words just seem to flow across my screen until there were no more. Very enjoyable read indeed.

    ~Ron~


  • RobertPaulson
    July 11
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    lovely

    ah... the beauty of earth comparing only to the beauty of a love. nicely penned as usual.


  • BrianTheB
    July 11

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    great

    dont think i can top any of the other comments here, but uhh... i still enjoyed it.
    i like it when people right about love, makes me feel warm and fuzzy inside ^^


  • rrw gold member
    July 8
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    great!

    Love the rhythm  and rhyme schemes you created here. It gives it a very soft, flowing feel... as a poem about "magic moments" in love should be. I also like how you blended both nature and "human love" together to give that feel that love is very natural. The love you speak of here in this poem seems to be very relaxed and comfortable... and that in itself can be very exciting...


  • dreamingofheaven
    July 7
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    Amazing poem


  • Devils Reject
    July 7
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    This piece is perfect in my opinion. I loved it from beginning to end.


    • ShaShay
      July 22
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      How smart you are Ms. Devil. LOL I see our tastes do run parallel in some things. Watch out for this poet though, he is a sneaky little beast. (but I still luv him)
      Leaving this one unsigned....wonder why?


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    July 7
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    This is very beautiful and well written!
    I love the imagery and thought that you
    put into this piece. Wel done and I wish
    you all the best in these two contests.
    Thanks a lot for sharing it with all of us
    here. Take care and keep up the wonderful
    work!




    Jeremy0826


  • albymyheart gold member
    July 7
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    Beautiful poem on love.A pleasure to read and soak into your words here...Alby


  • BloodyThorn
    July 6
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    Beautiful

    Great poem well worth a read or two.


  • Wolfdog silver member
    July 6
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    Excellent

    'tis a very fine write, indeed. Imagery; rhythm, and rhyme are just fine. Thanks for sharing this one with us.

  • kirkman
    July 6
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    Tops!

    Beautiful poem beautifully written.


  • PhoenixRisingSun
    July 6
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    I love it. makes me feel like i am with the girl of my dreams as i read it


  • Young andRestless
    July 6
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    breathtaking imagery

    loved every line
    simply fantastic

    -scott


  • sjedju
    July 5
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    I thought this was really descriptive and developed a nice mental image

  • angeldreams
    July 5

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    Wow.
    Simply beautiful.
    Each word was a treat.
    Everything written here just danced in front of my eyes as I read.
    Really amazing.
    All the best in the contest.
    -Swati

  • Juno101
    July 5
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    this is some good piff. The images that come to mind are awesome. Keep on jizzing.


  • Daxteriana
    July 4
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    this was a beautiful write. the imagery terrific and the flow really nice. mostly, poets like you are the ones that keep AP alive. Without such wondrous works of art, we would be lifeless. Nothing would keep us working, nothing would tell us that there is something to live for. thank you for sharing such a perfectuous (I don't think that is a word ) piece of literature.

    Dax


  • Wolfdog silver member
    July 4

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    Excellent

    A very fine write, indeed. Imagery; rhythm, and rhyme are just fine. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Again, well done.


  • therenaissancegirl
    July 4
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    such lips, as moist as any blossomed dawn

    That line was almost Shakespearean in quality. Great, passionate write!


  • Kiran silver member
    July 4

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    This is really wonderful!!! Absolutely stunning...I loved this


  • LovelyTraces
    July 3

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    Wow. This is truly beautiful. I do have one question, though. In the third line, is that comma after "night" necessary? It doesn't make sense to me.
    Other than that, this is perfect. Great job, and good luck in your contests!


  • Will Drache
    July 3
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    Perfection

    Thank you so much for the comments! You are also an amazing poet. I love your work


  • Mezclita
    July 3
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    nice to hear a man reflect so sweetly on sex n luv


  • BrokenHeart95
    July 3

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    I think this is a great poem with great expectations... I love the way you write...It is so exotic,true,expressive...Reading this poem,is taking you away...in your world of fantastic words and imagination!!!

  • rox yr jox
    July 3
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    ????

    if this is a girl who wrote this poem are you a lesbian???


  • Blah Blah Blah
    July 2
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    mwuahaha what cheap words you speak. I like the title though, it sounds like soft porn!


  • guardianhost gold member
    July 2
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    As always excellent Imagery

    Romantic, sensual very enjoyable read.
    All the best in the contest.


  • Allyson.Lashae.
    July 2
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    Dont forget to put your prompt and username spaced out in the AN, please and thank you


  • crivanea silver member
    July 2

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    so lovely! the words are so finely tuned! each line is oiled and fitted like a jigsaw puzzle ..lovely write!


  • awannabepoet
    July 2

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    A prettier picture could not exist even if it were on a canvas, words you weave so easily into a wonderful warm day shared by those whom know what love is at that moment in time.

    Another excellent poem indeed.

  • Aries gold member
    July 2
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    Lovely

    A lovely thoughtful write good luck in the contest


  • glenn shannon silver member
    July 2
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    soft warm and beautiful

  • poeticjoy
    July 1

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    The imagery employed is rich and pleasant, and blends well with the theme. Brilliant effort and a beautiful penning. You take care...... all the best.


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    July 1

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    A perfect day in gentle rhyme that would make any reader melt, well female, not too sure about the men

    A joy to read and i wish you all the best in the contest.

    Sue
    x


  • Gunther gold member
    July 1
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    Soft rhymes and gentle flow. By golly, you've done it again!


  • Odds and Ends
    July 1
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    You're good at painting pictures. I think this is the third I've read from you in the past two days.

    So sensitive... almost pure, but not quite. romantic. such lips! you can almost hear the writer sigh as he explains that.

    Anyhow, thanks again for a GREAT read!


  • midnight-tears
    July 1
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    awesome :)

    gr8 i luv the feel to this


  • silkspinner89
    July 1
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    great!! ;D


  • SinfullyYoursLove
    July 1
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    lovely work!i love the rythm in your poems and the natural flow!!you are a very good poet!!


  • Agromenmon
    June 30

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    good

    Good meter, felt the syncopation of the first two lines was lost a bit as the verses became smoother but rhythmically I guess that helped the last line finish well. Was good


  • Vane-dahh
    June 30
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    THIS WAS GREAT I RELLY LYKED IT!!!

  • onlyforyou
    June 30

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    Awesome!

    I love this poem!! fantastic flow, and rythem. you are a terrific writer. It really struck a chord.
    "such lips, as moist as any blossomed dawn, speak silently while we enjoy this lawn."


  • artistinside
    June 30

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    This is pure poetry. You really understand the essence of what words and meanings is. This has the feeling of a classic poet.

    All of the words flow together very well. The only distracting word, to me, is "devoured" because it is so different from the gentle, playful words you have to describe everything else. I know finding another word for that isn't easy, but it would be worth it.

    My favorite lines:
    "...while the night,/inches quietly toward our respite."
    "And wonderous time's fine flow sets us aglow."

    Excellent work you have here. Keep writing.

  • monkey3243
    June 30
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    wonderful!


  • xhanfanx
    June 30
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    beautiful wordin


  • My Chronos gold member
    June 30

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    I really felt the poem had a great ending and it rhymed well after one passes through the first few lines. Very romantic and lovely in how it was written.


  • JohnnyTruant
    June 30
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    The language is beautiful and I like the rhymes. Good job.


  • SkyScraper Soul
    June 30
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    Beautifully written


  • PurpleMemories
    June 30

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    Beautiful piece.I like the way you've described her.I like the title and the romantic feeling I get from your poem.Nicely done.

  • pocket pixie gold member
    June 30
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    nice rhyming


  • Poetrist
    June 28
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    That was so romantic and beautifully written!


  • darl3n3
    June 28
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    Eloquent.


  • poisonivystar4
    June 28
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    How romantic!


  • Night Terrors
    June 28
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    wonderful job! A fasinating style I must say really made for a nice flow. I think that there is something very special about this. The woman you spoke of sounds intregueing. What a sensual and loving poem. It had a whimsical feel too it. I really enjoyed reading this!

  • Topnotchsy
    June 28

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    Beautiful piece. I really enjoyed the soft rhyming and the feel it gave when reading this. I can see why it is so popular.

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