Every breath inhaled
Is filled with you
I'm reluctant to exhale
For fear of losing any part of you
Each day seamlessly blending with the next
As routine sets in
Daily events are no longer as special
Barely receiving kisses on my cheek
As you rush out the door
and out of my day
Your life proceeds without me
A hectic schedule prohibiting compassion
For a neglected wife left at home
And a secret you have on the side
How can you so easily forget our years
You're more than willing for things to remain the same
I think I have been too
Is loving you merely a habit?
I've loved you so long that I couldn't imagine life without you
I never dreamed I'd be strong enough to walk away from you
It may be hard
It's definitely frightening
But I must say goodbye to our life
And move on
I am a woman that needs to be loved every day
Not just when it's convenient
Author notes
Silver in Delphinidae's contest allpoetry.com/Contest/648129
Written March 20th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- CONTEST: Giving up or Letting go. by StayWithMe.
333 points, ended June 5, 2004, 82 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Wow - this is excellent - this is exactly how I felt about my marriage. It seems you have captured my feelings precisely. Congrats on your silver win!
OH sheesh and you wearing that dreadful cast hahahah
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Your style with the lines in italics works so well. There are too many relationships where one partner is taken for granted, and, in this case, also unfaithful. The hardest part is always leaving. It makes us all the more vulnerable. We often get locked into the relationship, not knowing how to leave, or where to find the strength. 'Is loving you merely a habit?' That is so true in many cases I am sure. Excellent write, as always.
PS: LoL at Stacy's comment.. I can picture you in my head wearing Candy's cast
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Now i'll never win...
running against you...ugh you meanie...
i hope you fall down the stairs!!
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Wow... A very well written poem that says it all without flinching. I like it. Thank you for entering my contest.
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This sounds like my life,no kisses,rush out ,how can you forget
our years .all of it ,every word every line ,wish I could of wrote this.exellent job!and when the kisses,and I loves you stop,It really is time to leave -
Parting is such sweet sorrow, sing the sorrows of tomorrow. Ya gotta do what ya gotta do. This had me in a predicament that placed me in the scene but I was neither of the "characters". It was a great write. It is hard to leave things behind but when you know it's somethin ya gotta do...you have to push yourself & bring yourself to do it. Thanks for commenting on my poem "Mother's Day" I wish I could get her to sit on her butt all day but truthfully she has never "taken a day off" or mother's day. She thinks of it as just another day. She does the usual things she does every day.
~The end comes to a close
A rapture of light
Death by asphyxiation~
Rayne ~Suicidal Poet~ -
I never expected it to place, you had way too many excellent entries. I just wanted to make sure it didn't offend you since you didn't comment
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babe I'm sorry... no I was NOT offended and I DID read it, but at some point I wanted to get it JUDGED and I was running out of time so I had to stop commenting... this is an EXCELLENT poem- and i happen to be a HUGE fan of adultry poems from the wife perspective (at least that was MY interpretation)- the only reason this didn't place babe, is that I was looking for a particular type of poem... but this is AMAZING!
Stephi
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Kudos
I like the afterthoughts put into this wonderfully written poem. It just added so much mood to it, nice choice of words also. Better than the occasional clche` that we are forced to use -
It takes alot of stregnth to come to the decision and actually follow through with it. Sometimes the ruts we get into seem very comfotable but then for some reason we grow out of it and need to move on
Good luck
Natalia -
Excellent
WOW! I love it a woman has to do what a woman has to do!! Excellent write! -
Excellent
Great format used here - it gives the poem that little something extra. I like the goodbye and the fact that it's fairly positive - that you can see that moving on is for the best, a very strong ending which is very inspiring. (Although at times quite emotional and saddening.) A brilliant poem which I thoroughly enjoyed. Very well done! -
Thank you very much.
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great.
Beautiful good bye, I like this strong way You eksplain all You lack at this relationship, You need to finish. Great written, make me think about my relationship too. Thank You for Your comment also. Anna -
It's not easy to leave a part of your life behind, but sometimes it just has to be done. Was the hardest thing I ever did, but somehow I was able to. I'm at a loss for words here hon...(you do that to me a lot )
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you only got three points haha
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wow, this is really good...you don't lie! It's long, but that's not a bad thing, it does just run on like so many other poems i have read at this length...it has a really good flow to it, i don't only give you an applause, it's a standing ovation...Great job, keep up the awesome work...I've notice your poetry is starting to get deeper and deeper nice work!!!
God bless!
love you!
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I debated on the contractions, I thought they were making my lines too long... normally I do keep them to a minimum but I notice I have a ton in here. Thank you so much
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Awesome read.
I really enjoyed the image it painted in my head and I could feel the emotion in the writing. The only technical problem that you might want to do in your writing is cut off contractions. They turn writing passive and it can easily be the dividing line between awesome and pretty cool. I thought it was an awesome read. -
You know by now that this is an awesome write.
The end of this poem is now inside of my head and hopefuly will get out of there very soon!
Great work! Good luck in the contest! I believe you will take a trophy with this one.
Mari
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I loved the first stanza....I know how that feels. I also know how the rest of it feels, though I have not been married, I have been in a long time realtionship and...yeah...it gets to the point of routine not love and I htink you described that well. the form of your poem was cool, with the italics Good job and Good luck!
Peace and love
Susan -
Excellent write!!!! I so agree with the being loved everyday, not when it`s convenient. That`s the problem with men these days. -.- Awesome poem! One of the best I`ve seen!!! Be strong, and do what`s best for yourself!!!
-Catie -
This is fantastic.. the format and teh italicised lines really adds to teh overall feel...Women everywhere need to be as strong as you. We all deserve to be loved!This is such a good peom, and I'm sure many females will take great courage from your words... Im simply lovin' this
xxx
Scarlet -
beautifully written, you described this so well that even though i've never been there (yet-- *crosses fingers*), i can sort of see what it's like. i'm hoping it's not happening to you though, and if it is, well i hope things work out, and soon... but anyways, nice poem
-taori -
Oh sweetie
I hope this isn't happening to you
But all too often we stay with someone for so long we can't imagine life without them
That is how it was for hubby and I
We split last March after 21 yrs of marriage and just got back together in Oct
You never know what you have until it's gone
A brillant write and one I could relate too
Keep on penning hun
Love n hugs
Susan~~~
You got to read some of my poems sometimes lol
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Perfect
Definitely on the top for me out of all your poems.
It paints such a good picture,tells such a great story.
I told you that the line "Is loving you merely a habit?"
has a very strong meaning to it.I think that one line will lead people in relationships like that to see the light,because so many people are like that.Hopefully it will.perfect story baby. -
Wow, I liked reading this. And I really liked the ending. You did an awesome job. Nice!
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THis is great and I agree with slicks78 it is powerful and you express yourself well. You have my praise!
Beck
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Wow, very very powerful. I can say though it's not me personally, I knwo alot of women in my life that feel the same way you do. It's very hard to say good bye. To ANYone, let alone a husband or a long time lover.. You are truly strong, and brave. The writting was beautiful- powerful and so very filled with emotion. I could hardly pick a favorite line.. But I think the ending was most powerful.
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*is sorry
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This si a very good piece of work and i applaude it. Great masterpiece!
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Greetings,
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I totally understand this becuase I've been there. I've never been married but I was dating a guy for a year and a half and we thought about getting married. But the relationship just became so routine and it's like we weren't even really in love anymore but we had become so used to it that we didn't know what else to do. Great write! Good luck in the contest!
~Lise
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this is a beautiful poem- its sad- and i hope you arent going through this as well- but im guessing you are because your poem has such emotion and wow...this s amazing. Great write!
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beautiful...I hope this isn't happening to you...I hope this doesn't happen to you, but if it is then I hope you can get through it
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