Look at my mother's face,
and see the most beautiful woman in the world.
It's got all those marks on it... you might call her a cheese face.
But she's MY cheese face.
And her cheese face will own yours any day.
She doesn't hide it with much.
Just a little powder and a smile, and she's on her way.
God, I think about her and I wonder how she smiles and she's so patient with everyone.
And how she has, so she gives what she can.
She's a dreamer and a realist.
She knows what she wants, and what she can get.
I wonder how she feels the few times she looks at me. The little trooper.
I almost died.
Lost one before my brother.
And one right before me.
Doc's weren't expecting me to live long- here I am.
Babysitter refused to watch me any more. Afraid I might die under her supervision someday.
Suppose things didn't go according to plan.
I might not look the most like her. But I don't need to. I behave very much like her, down to the most minute and irrelevant detail.
She barely raised me.
That makes me think about that famous question: nature or nurture?
Of course,
I learned to hate from you.
But no one taught me to pull my feet back from any kind of splashing water.
And how is it that in a family full of pigs, I eat as tidily as she?
Author notes
This spawned from what would have been a sleepless night if I hadn't written it down.
It's kind of meant to be a spoken word shaped out from ramblings running through my head. I might decide to update it later, slightly tempted to submit a video.
Do you think this could have been phrased better? Or are there more adequate words I could have used in some places?
Comments
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nice, though i could tell it was fairly fragmented and despite the fact you tied most of the lines together i still feel it needs work. I can't really see where this is going either. Though admittedly that not a bad thing it can get tricky to figure out where your going to help you improve.Though I like the ending


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this could be done better, if the right words are used and idioms as well
nice sharing .. good write
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