my red balloon
flew away
taking wonder-
I am left
your tears of mortality...
cushion
my fall
from innocence
Author notes
Contest amazing picture ~ speaks volumes by Lavender Butterfly
picture is your prompt
photo by ~ Mark Goldstein
A contest entry
- amazing picture ~ speaks volumes by Lavender Butterfly.
450 points, ended June 24, 15 entries
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It used to break my heart when I'd lose a balloon to the sky...then I got to where I would set them free on purpose, to watch them soar until I could no longer see their trail. Indeed, your words speak volumes, even in brevity. 
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a good poem penned, ah we have to release the olden times and move into the future, there is a time for eveything i reckon, so we must let go of all the balloons we once held when young, such is the way of this crazy life we live in and endure.
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Wow... this epitomizes(sp) the loss of childhood and innocence... you crammed so much emotion and turmoil into so few words... this is pure excellence... so deep and profound... not to mention thought provoking... never change a thing
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so beautifully profound... x
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love the playful childlike style coupled with the loss of innocence -'tears of mortality' , lots of room for the reader to imagine. like how the 'from innocence' is visually wide too, the mattress to land on. great little poem
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Thanks, Mark. The brevity is a wonderful challenge for me... smiles....
I'm really happy you like this one.
nods
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