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~The Devil makes house calls you know? ~

Missing image

 

 

 

I do recall seeing him

the first time outside Winn Dixie ,

I think he is a cousin of a friend

of mine.

 

 

 

My Daddy taught me

when a man looks at you, never give

him the satisfaction he's caught

your attention;   

 

 

 

and I did not!

I just kept on walking.

 

 

 

Not even when he started coming

around, leaving at my door step

mason Jars of his Grandmother's

signature cherry jelly.

 

 

 

 

I'd seen him through the curtains a

 number of times, and still did not

pay him any regard for his efforts.

 

 

 

 

Visions of him crawling deep inside my skin

in those places I kept hidden, had me

thinking about him more than I

wanted to.   

 

 

 

 

it was then by chance,

that he heard my music in the back

yard, did I catch  him peering over

the  fence.

 

 

 

 

I was laying naked on a chaise with

 my sun glasses on in the balmy heat

of the day;   enjoying my iced tea.

 

 

 

 

 

He coughed out loud 

as if to get my attention, i've never been

ashamed of what the good Lord gave me, so I laid

there and asked him his name.

 

 

 

 

as he came through the gate  

he just stared, no words, then he spoke

 a smooth southern drawl escaped from

his lips and a smile so devilish, that

alone made me warm and tingly.    

 

 

 

 

he then said

Ma'am I came to make

your acquaintance, in his hand was a

jar of the signature jelly.        

 

 

  

  

 

he then came closer,

knelt, whispered the most

sinfully delicious things in my ear

taunting me with his common talk;

oh how I wanted common, I wanted

him.

 

 

 

 

he opened up that jar, dipped his

fingers in, touched places with that

jelly and proceeded  to lick & taste me

until I moaned with so much pleasure,

 I could barely breathe!

 

 

 

 

 

But what else was I to do?  

I have never been guilty of a lack of

hospitality so I obliged him.     

  

 

 

 

After today I am thoroughly convinced

the devil does makes house calls.

 

 

Author notes

4. The Devil makes house calls you know?

I do have to say that was the stickiest
and most enjoyable mess i have ever encountered
and the biggest bee trap and then again....
that’s another story.

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  • jackreed3 gold member
    October 27
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    Nice Write... I much Think this write
    is a Blessing.. JackReed3...


  • Ellegirl silver member
    August 18

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    Thhis poem deserves a TOAST! Wonderful and very sexy poem. Good job.
    Fun experience. Clean up not so fun.

  • STUNNING !!!
    This Is incredible, one very breathless write that just flows across the page and mind


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      August 18
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      awww i dropped the ball,
      thank you so much for stopping to read
      and clappies, thank youso much for your
      comment wow i am blessed

      Blessings *& Love
      Rend


  • Andiness
    July 16
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    forgot your clappies

  • Andiness
    July 16

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    Oh I love this!! The story contrasted with the form to me in a way that I can't explain!!

    I loved how it started kind of innocent and changed at the end so much. And speaking of endings...I LOVED this one!

    -Andi

    • Rend the Veil gold member
      August 18
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      thank you!! i went to read and comment on yours, I loved your write
      thank you so much for stopping,
      Many blessings

      Rend

    • thank you so much for stopping and commenting and those applauses
      your support means alot.

      blessings

      Rend


  • JamesHardy gold member
    July 16

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    I love this piece!

    Rend,

    I can't think of anything that would make this one scintilla better. This is totally hot, bravo! Home run! The only compliment I will pay this piece is to keep coming back to read it when I want to give my pulse a jumpstart and just feel alive with the "the deliciousness of my sex" as Walt Whitman puts it.

    The title entices you to read the piece. The first line sucks you right into the gut feeling of THIS IS REAL SLICE OF LIFE. It's just earthy and genuine. To be honest, I don't think you need the last line at all, in fact brevity is Tabasco, ending it with, "I obliged him!"

    Jack

  • jackreed3 gold member
    July 12

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    Your right there the devil makes house calls ... but love love comes from heavean of all... we cant help but sin and lust.. this poem is great and you are earning my trust.... JackReed3....

  • Oh...oh, I'm in trouble!! I rubbed off on you...

    BAD, bad Debbie!

  • P.S.

    I adore the comments from your AP friends.

    Yep, you are DEFINITELY a naughty good girl!

  • Hehehehe...

    I do so love a man with a southern draaawwwl. And I do have that particular brand of neighborliness myself. If you see him and don't want him, send him my way, I promise to show him the best of southern hospitality!

    Yummy! LOL

    • oh sis, you do have that southern hospitality,
      i say and that drawl to boot!! i love talking to you
      blessing and love you so much!!!


      and i am only as naughty as my southern sis,
      i told you, you rubbed off on me
      Blessings

      Rend

  • Oh my...

    Quite the story Rend.

    Thanks.


  • queenie
    July 3

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    ok, this is too good! whether this really happened or not, has no effect on the creativity that went into this. that was one smooth devil and the way you showed him made him a gentle soul,albiet a gentle soul who put it on you, but still gentle. this leaves ne with no doubt that the devil makes house calls. my best to you in the contest.


  • Dixie Dawn gold member
    July 2

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    Gosh! he could make a call at my house..LOL...I love the piece, it is so well written and the imagery is excellent, you had my attention!

  • You've crafted a very interesting piece.
    Well done!
    Nela

  • oh...my word.... WOW! This was... just wow! I am definetly in need of a cold shower now LOL! This is brilliant! I love the way it was written, and it definetly kept my attention... More like, I couldn't pull my eyes away from it!!! Brillaint write! Congrats on poem of the day!


    wow...


  • voodoo ink Greeters member
    July 1

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    Today's Featured Poem!!!

    WOW! This leaves me speechless and breathless, and now I have to take a cold shower, you bad girl!
    I have to feature this for today's poem and share this with everyone!

    Blessed Be,
    Jeremy

    • thank you so much for featuring me,
      I am honored and for your clappies too

      Blessings

      Rend


  • awannabepoet
    June 29

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    I see the signature of a little devil here, one whom would spread his signature jelly on whom he may, for if he does make house calls surely he had more places to be and further little crevaces to explore.

    Yet he did find his match when he happened onto thee, for in thee there is absance of malicious intent, just the pleasure of a warm balmy afternoon delight.

    I like it, I like it so!

  • Oh wow this had me glued to the edge of my seat just awaiting the outcome! What a truly amazing write on the prompt, so sensually stylish and you nailed that prompt!
    Best wishes with this.
    Gaylene


  • Garmond gold member
    June 29

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    Just needed to close my eyes and savour the images this painted within my mind... before I could comment. Descriptive, sensuous, warm and utterly delicious. I love how you slowed it down with the spaces between the stanzas... ensuring it is read at the right pace... and building expectation at the same time. I tip my hat to thee good lady.


  • Amera gold member
    June 28

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    Your daddy was right! This is absolutely captivating, sensuous and penned with class.

    Love,
    Amera♥

    • Amera,

      thank you for your comment and applauses
      i didnt forget about you i ma so behind on commenting!!

      Blessings

      Rend


  • DolceVito gold member
    June 27

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    Superb piece, Rend...Btw, I made more cherry jelly Beautifully done

    • you want it with bread this time Vito lol
      Thank you for Commenting, You are always so funny!

      Blessing

      Rend

  • great poem(:


  • SpydurPoet gold member
    June 27

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    Wow. That was absolutely amazing. I loved it. You did a fantastic job captivating the reader. It was beautiful.
    Write on.
    ~*~SP~*~

  • friend
    June 27
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    funny story. you're a good storyweaver.

  • well, you tell that devil, put his cowboy hat on and make his way to colorado I'm a waitin' hehe. damn, this was good, HOT BABY HOT!

    • that is funny!! yes my dear friend i have sent him on his way he he
      Thank you so much for your comment,

      Blessings

      Rend


  • Rose Angel gold member
    June 26

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    Well, Rend, you most certainly took the prompt seriously, and did it really happen some would say?
    Showing some southern hospitality? Hmm....that jelly, and that devil.
    I don't think"the devil made me do it" can be applied here. This was not a close call...This was a call! m.
    Creatively penned!

    • Mom,

      I do have to say that i have alway depended on the kindness of strangers
      oh who said that? ! Blanche from street car name Desire" great movie,
      you know me mom what do you think?

      Blessings

      Rend


  • penman gold member
    June 26

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    Excellent

    Oh my I think you captured the title so very well. Really gave it such life with your words. A terrific take on the meaning. Best of luck in the contest.

  • Damn...can I come over?

    Oh, wait a minute, that was badly worded.

    This is very playful, cheeky, but with a nice mean streak of inferred hotness...works perfectly.

    Good write.


  • DeJaBlue
    June 26

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    I love the southern-ness you have let shine in this, being southern myself ...makes me wish I'd hung around Winn Dixie more often Wonderfully descriptive and steamy.


    Amy

    • Thank you so much for your comment Amy, yes you never know who you will meet
      and where

      Blessings

      Rend


  • poppa
    June 26

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    makes house calls ?? wish she'd hurry up and get here lol... certainly held this readers interest, good luck

    • sorry this ones mine!! you are laughs actually i am LMAO
      big time!! thank you so much Rob,

      Blesssings
      Rend


  • Swan song gold member
    June 26
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    lol I am sure that he does. My you tell a tempting story and it was delicious!!!!!!!

  • A piece that totally lures a reader in. Intriguing, satisfying, intense and definately raises the heat

    Exceptional job

    Passions

    • Thank you so much for your comment, it means alot, coming from the Sensual Queen her self!

      Blessings

      Rend


  • teddybare gold member
    June 25

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    mighty kind of you mamm

    wow that turned um ... well lets just leave it at it turnned loved it .. to no end

    • TeddyBare,

      Thank you hmmm ok i see the little devil me knows what your thinking !!!

      blessing

      Rend

  • silverfish
    June 25
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    mmm. close calls, too. -f

    • SilverFish,
      I am so blessed yeah thank you so much for your comment
      and applauses

      Blessings
      Rend


  • white stone
    June 24

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    "he opened up that jar, dipped his
    fingers in, touched places with that
    cherry jelly and proceeded to lick
    taste me until I moaned with so much
    pleasure, I could barely breathe."
    Holy Good Christ that's hot.
    This is so southern, I doubt most people on here have any idea what a "Winn Dixie" is.
    You are really honing your style, I see. Diggin' it.


  • thepoetssoul
    June 24

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    This is a fantastic piece of poetic prose.I felt myself drifting into your work, I even read it with a southern drawl.
    Wonderfully written in splendid colour and taste.

    Tony


  • Daizee silver member
    June 24
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    I can't think of a better way to share a jar of jelly


  • SteveS gold member
    June 24

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    The house next to me is for sale, ya know? ..lol.
    This is a smooth write....the bee trap part is a riot.

    • you are a riot!! and yes that bee trap was a funny i just couldn't resist thank you so much for your support, was that you looking over my fence ? lol

      Blessings

      Rend


  • penman gold member
    June 24
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    Excellent

    Wow, amazing write. So descriptive and invoke such feelings. A great job. Best of luck in the contest.


  • Maxboy gold member
    June 24

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    A wonderful story of your beautiful hospitality sweetie.

    Very Nice Sis....Best wishes in the contest
    Bro


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    June 24

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    Awesome
    I love how you talk poetry
    the way this unfurls
    Sensually enlighting a treasure of untamed thoughts
    Loved every line
    Good luck always
    Julie x


  • Cup-a-Joe
    June 24

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    Hotter than July

    Oh my jelly. I have some peanut butter.
    This is written in such good southern style.
    I will never look at a jar of jelly with out thinking of you,from now on.

    Joe


  • Ademon
    June 23

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    oh my.... WOW!

    .........Oh wow!!! If this is based of real life experience....I Applaud you!!!! *WORTHY* *WORTHY* *WORTHY* this is excellence at it's best, such imagery and beauty is seen... Thank you! *applaud* *applaud* *applaud*

    • Aww Aaron, you are a sweeties, as always you have come by to encourage me
      and give support.

      Thank you so much.

      Blessings

      Rend

  • wow... what a story. Well writ too.

    I bet any devil would enjoy you.

  • Bob Fox
    June 23

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    Rend

    What a delicious story. The scene unfolds and the lion whispers before her roars. And then the taste of flesh satifys both willing parties. Perhaps the devil should be thanked.

    • I will never thank him for my pleasure LOL, but i loved your comment!
      it ROCKED

      Bless you Bob.

      Rend


  • Xianaria gold member
    June 23

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    A delightful wicked read, loved the imagery and southern feel to this piece. Nicely done, I wish you well in the contest!

    Tim

    • thank you so much Tim.
      it was my pleasure really. and for your applause's

      Blessings

      Rend


  • Cannonsfire
    June 23

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    lol Well this sounds like a very attractive devil C


  • Swangrnv gold member
    June 23

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    MMMM...

    MMMMM...damn!!! I HATE THAT DUDE! l.o.l. lucky bastard! l.o.l. wow, very hot lady..whew..yeah..nice 'tasty' read..

    • I am glad you enjoyed, it was so fun to write,
      not my normal humor, just the sensual is,
      Thank you so much for coming to read and the aplauses
      I love that line [Lucky Bastard]
      Blessings

      Rend

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