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Naked in the Sun

Languid she lies on the lawn of lament
Her dawn will yet come
Daydreams will cement
Her ethereal path
This summer will last
Fresh blooms paper over the winters now past

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  • amaranthine lover gold member
    June 27
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    "Fresh blooms paper over the winters now past"

    How I love this line, so much power in it!

  • Eusebius
    June 24

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    Oh, I do so love the sound of this short poem, and it has such a dream-inducing and hypnotic quality! I absolutely loved it!!!


  • Cup-a-Joe
    June 24

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    Stephanie,

    Another well written poem. I esp like the last line.
    Pen on!

    Joe


  • IxI
    June 23

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    aaaaahhhh so refreshing. i felt my sinuses clear reading this uplifting piece. i like the alliteration in the first line, L's are always really fun to read in succession.
    great work. I really enjoyed it


    • BabyBun silver member
      June 23
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      Thanks so much - I just wrote it in a minute or so before going to bed - I am so glad you enjoyed it!

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