I can still see him daddy, his nasty little face is plastered to the back of my eyes. I’m scared daddy. What’s it like in heaven? How come I have to go alone? Why can’t you take me then come back? He was watching me all day daddy. From the other side of the fence. He stood in denim jeans and a lose blue jersey; he had converse trainers on as well. I remember because there the ones I wanted in the shop the other day. He had dirty black hair that sat on his grinning face. He scared me daddy, me and the others as well. We didn’t tell though, that would be silly. But now I wished we had. If we had would I be dying? Is it my own fault I won’t see tomorrow through? Oh daddy tell me! Come and wipe my tears away please, I don’t want to look scared when I leave you. I can’t stop these little droplets falling from my emerald gems daddy! Am I a coward? Don’t tell anyone this will you? This is between just you and me. Please? Daddy the pain is getting worse! The doctors will be too late, I can’t hold on much longer. But I’m glad I could see you before…before I left you. What I said this morning, about me hating you I never meant it! I never have meant it I was being stupid, please forgive me daddy. I love you, love you more than anyone ever could. Tell my sister Ruby I love her too, that she was really brave and that I love her for easing the pain. Oh daddy I can feel myself slipping away. Are those the sirens in the distance? Are the ambulances coming? Why don’t you tell them they will be too late? Tell them that the man ran, he dropped something though. If you promise not to tell I can tell you what it was. A little envelope with pictures of me and Ruby. They start from last year at my birthday party. That was fun that was daddy! It was the best birthday I ever had. And my last one. I won’t celebrate my birthday tomorrow will i? But I want you too. I want you to hold a massive party every year to remember me please. I had to fetch the ball when Sebastian kicked it over the fence. I didn’t want to. I did though. I was brave daddy, I walked right up to him ‘cos the ball was at his feet. Then he stabbed me. That silver little knife I thought I saw at the shops the other day. He followed us didn’t he daddy? I just worked it out. He wanted to kill me. He had been stalking us just to do this. I am sorry daddy. I would have stopped him if I knew how…oh daddy I can’t keep talking. You’re getting blurry. Those men with a stretcher shouldn’t bother. I have to go. Bye bye daddy, love you and tell ruby as well.
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Good job penning this piece. As a mom this was such a heartwrencher for me. I have so many fears of my children being wounded. This was a very emotional poem for me to read. Good job... you really pulled me into this write!
Thanks
Dezzi -
i'll have to check with co-judge, but this is not what we're looking for. this is not horror in the slightest, maybe a tear jerker if youre the right person, but not horror.
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this is why i hate stalkers -.- nice write.
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Quite a riveting story. Thank you for entering.
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Such realism
“WOW” this is good made me feel for that little boy and I think this is scarier then HELL it is a glimpse of reality that no one wants to think about it made me cry awesome poem
Good luck in the contest.
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yikes!
This was great..scary and spooky~
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chilled me thrilled me and so sad at the end too excellent story /poem spooked me out a lot thanks for entering and good luck
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This is very powerful.
As a parent, this really shook me to my core. It reminds me of the cruel horrors that many children continue to go through every day. Reading this, I felt like I was in the middle of a near-death experience. It was almost as if I had a short glimpse of Heaven, thinking of my own dad who I lost several years ago, and then being pulled back into this life. I think there are many who can relate to this poem on very personal levels. Very well expressed!
Don
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Wow..
I have tears in my eyes..
Such powerful emotion..
Very well done
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