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stardust.

to us the fragile sky so softly calls
reminding us of love's infinity
for us, ignited, every comet falls
a dim reflection of divinity.

~

the stars feel closer every day.
the ropes of night I hoped to sever
hold fast. yet, in some wanton way,
our hearts are swathed in earthshine ever.

Author notes

Okay, so the first part is iambic pentameter but the second part is iambic tetrameter... ah well. hope you like it anyway.
prompt: stardust

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  • msjuicytech
    July 24
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    Excellent... how did you learn all these different styles of poetry? You are fantastic. ;-)


    • Shya
      July 26
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      aw thanks... I try out different styles so I can find my own style... I don't really learn them, it's more like experimenting.

  • Kingfogger
    June 23
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    you say this is a work in progress, yes? Well I quite enjoy it as is. I would even suggest leaving it. but that is always up to you, the author. Good job though, and if you should expand I will find it and read the rest. good luck in the contest.


    kingfogger


    • Shya
      June 23
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      thank you, dear poet, for your encouraging comment