Then, unexpectedly, you turned my way.
What could I say? I blushed and looked aside.
Could I abide your concentrated gaze?
So through a haze of flowing hair I tried.
I cast my glance from under dark eyelashes
and leaned a little closer to invite.
Against my ribcage now my heartbeat crashes;
I try to speak but find my voice is tight.
I lick my lips as your hand touches mine,
then finally look you straight into your eyes.
I know now that you finally gave a sign
that let me know your heart could be my prize.
As evening comes and fog rolls from the sea,
I breathe your warm affection into me.
Author notes
2009 June 23
English Sonnet, with rhyme scheme: a-(a)b-(b)a-(a)b, cdcd, efef, gg
Lines 5, 7 have feminine endings.
This may be modified later for inclusion in a sonnet sequence.
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Yes! I like this very much, such an air of demureness, the nervousness, the veil of hair, sneaking a peek, and then eye contact, straight on, and that magic moment when two people feel that spark. Such a romantic scene set in a beautiful sonnet to boot.
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Thank you, darling!
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