Do you see the static?
I fanatically wrap my mind
around the crown of God's intention
I should mention before you get
the wrong impression and start guessing
"what's behind his eyes?"
I'm better left alone on my own
Creep around the corner to get stoned
Six different woman keep calling
I just turn off my phone
This heresy is scarring me
Daring me to bury dreams
Depravity starts to scream
Then, nothing's what it seems
These fastidious little minds
Feed off people from behind
Ripping out their fucking spine
"you're OK, now go stand in line"
Well, that's why I'm on my own
So just leave me the fuck alone!
Don't waste my time with that bullshit
I'm not having it from you half-a-wits
So, back off of this before I flip-a-bitch
Live from what you learn,
you need to earn your respect
Don't try to take what's mine
You must be blind or out of your mind
This truth you need to except
Author notes
12)They woke him with words, those cruel, bright weapons--------,T.H. White
This was just random. I think I was listening to too much Cypress Hill. I listen to every kind of music, from Morbid Angel, to The Eagles, to Bone Thugs N Harmony. Cause that's how I roll!!
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"These fastidious little minds
Feed off people from behind
Ripping out their fucking spine
"you're OK, now go stand in line"
wow amazing stanza.
best of luck in my contest and thanks for entering. -
YEAH!
fantastic, i loved every bit of it.
it's free thought to free form into the free and clear (stole that from cory of stone sour)
excellent write
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Interesting. I have to admit to disliking anger as a muse but it's definitely brought out your creative side so that's a good thing.
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i guess i now know why you don't answer my calls or im's? hmmm. this is a really good write from you today and i do hope i hear from you soon. viyanna rosemarie
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and music has a wired way of helping us create masterpieces, this is a great write, your emotions were expressed and it had a harmonis flow, yet it was Real, thanks for sharing this write , very good work
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Glad you enjoyed and thanks for the love!!!
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Interesting...
Maybe I'm just too old for Cypress Hill to get that reference but I still liked the poem... well done!
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Superb
'tis a very fine write, indeed. Imagery; rhythm, and rhyme are just fine. Thanks for sharing this one with us. -
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I like this poem ..it flows well the word choices are excellent and the theme is consistent throughout. The imagery is good and the reader can feel the experience. You did a wonderful job of creating a strong emotional statement as your word choices demanded our attention. Great work.
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This definately has a rhythm to it that feels like rap...you find it almost immediately and keep that pace for the entire length of the poem. It works well and serves the writing justice! great going!! peace & Light, Kendal
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that's how you roll
Dave, you fucking rocked this write all the way down to the last word. Fabulous. . .Cypress Hill
lol love em.
and I agree with Eric, better alone and stoned than with people who would just fuck you over anyway.
Love you always,
jin
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I killed that shit, HUH!!!! I'm going to ad more to it. So come back and see. Love you!!
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you stay alone because people piss you off, better alone and stoned than getting ripped off and suffering fools.welll that's what i do......good stuff...keep the grass growing, keep the smoke blowing......great stuff
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