The apple fell to the ground, cleaned and forgotten,
You set it down and let such red perfection go to waste.
Chronological disposition intact, you'll attack with all you have,
But your insincere acquiescence is frightfully lovely in an ugly sort of fashion.
Despicable imagination bound in velvet signed silk, tell me;
You blow holes into my uncomplicated finale. trust me;
Reason and rational battle and collapse in your palm, taste me;
Forgiven sins are awakened to deal damages to the dead. love me.
Rip that apple from your chest and call it a night,
Faking innocence is a crime not even you can pull off.
Paint the stars on your immoral background, forgotten dreams unraveled,
Ashes to ashes, we all fall down.
Author notes
The apple stands for a heart. 
Uhm. I don't really know what I think of this one, I was just kinda throwing stuff together because I was waiting to go to sleep after 19+ hours without it. So Im really unsure about it, but I really do like it.
A contest entry
- Prewrites by Dragonbabyx3.
800 points, ended July 6, 73 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - PREWRITE MADNESS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! by Kathraina.
650 points, ended August 15, 456 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Nyar. =^.^= Comments?
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this is definitly great. the apple simbolizing the
was really sweet and sad. I enjoyed this piece and just intrigued me when I saw the word "apple" because I found it strange. But the apple symbolizing the was really cool. Nice work!
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haha.
i love apples.
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I really enjoyed this piece.
Their is a uniqueness and creativeness that is really appealing to my eye.
I love your word choice, it paints amazing imagery. Good tone to this piece as well.
Bravo
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thank-you. im glad you like it!
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Wow i dont even know if i have words for this one...This is simply amazing the metaphor is perfect and the flow and exquisiteness of the poem is simply fantastic.
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Thank-you. Im glad you like it.
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This is brilliantly amazing! I Loved the way this was written, the thought and emotion you put into this had shivers flowing down my spine! You did an excellent job with this, even on lack of sleep! One correction: "You blow holes into my uncomplicated finally" Finally should be Finale. Other than that, you did a wonderful job, and thankyou for entering my contest, and Good Luck
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>.> You are fight. It should be Finale. I will change it right away. ;D Thank-you very much for your comment, I appreciate it. You give excellent ones and they are always encouraging.
Again, thank-you very much; I am glad you like it.
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