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[With Eyes Half Closed]



With eyes half closed
do lines appear upon the paper
subconsciously intended

and fall in place
cross hatched
in India ink  permanence,
pen in hand directed
with eyes half closed?

Would sensory memories
of chemicals and
setting fixatives

return by inference
old photographic images
released from canisters
to glossy grays and blacks

to live anew,
performing for
a fresh-eyed  audience?

Does it all begin again,
art re-birthed
while the world watches
with eyes half open?



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In response and respect to
bozoloper's [If I Closed My Eyes]

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Author notes

Posted in Ms. Marvel, but not taking
any more chances, parking it here as well!
http://allpoetry.com/poem/5466011

Author notes
A manner of creation,
eyes half open, squinting, visualizing
as subconscious guides
the open mind, the willing hand,
to boldly face a myriad of eyes.
The viewer might screen out
extraneous perceptions
with eyes half open
to sharpen focus.

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(In response and respect to bozoloper)



[ if i closed my eyes ]

if i closed my eyes
slipped into the world of colors
bright as sun spots

and breathed
one after the other
in that not so eternal game
of give and take
we all play with the world

would this pass?
could the loose ends
catch up with the beginnings

would i open myself back to the world
and find the picture completed
hanging off a wire
dripping fixative?

or would this spooled roll of film
still lay in the canister
ready to reveal all its secrets

while a room full of people
wait
for the slide show
to begin?

bozoloper
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http://allpoetry.com/poem/4229695
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  • T-Dizzle Mcnizzle
    July 12

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    You are an incredible writer. For me, when I read this I thought of old black and white films from the 40's being digitally remastered for today's audience...there is so much more in this poem though...brilliantly done!


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      July 12
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      Hi, T-D!

      The hanging from the wire dipping fixative
      visuals from Loper's piece, which I was
      echoing in reponse sent my mind to the
      darkroom! So pleased that those who care
      are salvaging those old black and white gems
      on reels, saving them from further deterioration.

      Thank you!

      M-C


  • hugh wyles silver member
    June 23

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    Dear M-C

    With eyes half-closed it seems to me
    my vision is much less
    but things I do not want to see
    remain, I do confess.

    But, if I close my eyelids tight,
    within my inner view
    I see all sorts of things that might
    surprise both me and you!

    Your poem offers much to the imagination but as I sit experimenting with my eyes half-closed, the white becomes a blur against the black background so I think I'll stay open-eyed so that I can enjoy your artistry.

    Applause, love and hugs, XXX Hugh.

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      June 23
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      Thanks, Hugh. I am enjoying your musing!

      An artist's trick, the half-closed eyes,
      helps to put distance between the artist
      and the art work in progress, to see
      the essentials, examine the compositon,
      to see the essence and thus continue
      the renewal process, re-birth of lines,
      shape, form, values.

      The concept could apply to any situation,
      focussing on what is important by removing
      the foucus on the extraneous.

      M-C



  • waydownuponjoy
    June 23

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    Mornin’ -With Eyes Half Open

    With eyes half open
    do minds appear upon the paper
    consciously suspended

    then crawl into space
    un-latched
    and ready to absorb
    with eyes half closed?

    Just kidding .. I did like your response poem to bozoloper's original and how they seemed to meld toward one another from opposite corners. joy

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      June 23
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      Aha! Poet delves farther---into the un-latched space,
      your mind always on the move!

      Always the astute observer---"from opposite corners."
      Your interactions are much appreciated, joy.

      M-C


  • Pisces rainbow gold member
    June 23

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    Third time is the charm I hope
    I have been trying to leave a comment
    we are half awake and half asleep
    our perception is effected by this
    this is why there so much diversity in the world, but as in all there is purpose
    to find unity in diversity
    I love diversity it's colorful
    lovely profound write my friend dressed up with your unique and beautiful art
    God bless you my friend...

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      June 23
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      Hi, Kathy!
      Oh, no, not trouble posting here, too.
      I had posted this thru my new Ms. Marve site,
      which has disappeared overnite multiple times.
      So to not lose it the piece, I posted here, too.

      Interesting point you bring out, the unity in diversity.
      Perhaps those half-closed eyes are able to dicard the differences
      and hone in on the sinilarity in the hearts.

      Thank you,

      M-C


  • Yemassee gold member
    June 23

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    I think you did quite well with the style and mood of Loper's piece. Both inquizitive, wondering about the completion of things...life, experience, personal growth....

    I can't answer your question since my mind is permanently shut off and I just write from an insular point of view.

    The world's eyes are always only half-open....

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      June 23
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      Well, from your cerebral point of view
      you do seem to see outside yourself
      in remarkable manner, delving, probing
      with great success. It's interesting
      to contrast how a person perceives
      himself and how others see him.

      I think your fan club sees you as much more
      gregarious and observant than you allow
      in your self-description!

      Half-open sometimes good, screening out
      excessive extraneous matter!!

      • Yemassee gold member
        June 23
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        Yeah, folk think I am wild and crazy. It takes online friends of mine quite a while before they realize there is a big difference between Writing site Yem and real life Mayne.

        • Aesthete2000 gold member
          June 23
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          One needs only to read down your lists
          to find the contrast easily. I read over
          all your poem lists seeking to find one
          piece that I could do justice to in a
          response. The real you as Mayne
          surges in and out of the posts,
          bringing forth the tenderness,
          the shyness, the out-of-the-spotlight
          observer.


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    June 23

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    excellent

    Enjoyed the read very much sis...
    Loved these lineswould this pass?
    could the loose ends
    catch up with the beginnings
    I would love to be able to tie up some loose ends LOL
    I just posted a new one drop by when you can
    Hugs
    Your sis
    Susan~~~

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