cellular explosions collide
heavy against bone fragments
you consist of;
pomegranate melodies
sharp, sweet and deliciously sour
longing to experience;
sidewalk graffiti,
to breathe in choking humidity,
and wall street crashing
absorbing
last chance,
dusk tinted smiles
as if time is running out
letting humanity crush you
behind closed doors
Author notes
prompt; picture 20-50 words
[50 words exactly]
A contest entry
- One more Midnight quickie by Dragonbabyx3.
700 points, ended June 23, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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pomegranate melodies
sharp, sweet and deliciously sour
your imagery in the first half of the poem is amazing
congrats on gold!
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Congrats on the trophy. This poem is definatly wortht the gold I have to favorite parts to this. 'pomegranate melodies
sharp, sweet and deliciously sour' 'letting humanity crush you
behind closed doors'. Simply Amazing work my friend
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crushing humanity
like the unusual flow of this dark poem. especially relate to the last 2 lines:
letting humanity crush you
behind closed doors
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this is really amazing, i'm not sure exactly what it meant but it sent a chill up my spin in a good way, great poem, well deserved gold there
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fuck yea. excuse me, i tend to lose my composure when I read something exceptional.
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Superb piece by you, beautifully done
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wow this is so deep. i loved your metaphors really brillant!!
Blessings
Rend
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Geez;
the ending is just so perfect.
And the picture just made the entire thing seem like it was implying something else, which was really cool.
One of the best I've read today[: -
great pic, hits home... but the piece is female angst/depression, the kind of things I, as male, am supposed to avoid creating (to no avail...); the write and sentiments fit the contest title well...
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"pomegranate melodies"
Beautiful
well written.
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this is so deep. i like the metaphors and meaning you have behind...wall street crashing, humanity crushing....its great. youre reallt talented...your words are beautiful.
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this poem has a big meaning to me! =]
thank you sooo much for posting this
i obviously loved it!
especially the whole format of it, very creative. -
pomegranates are my addiction!
i even have pomegranate shampoo.
haha. probably shouldnt admit that. =]
anyhoo.
loving the poem.
no surprise yu got the gold.
was well deserved.
congrats.
x
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i haven't had a pomegranate in so long! now i want one. great! this is a very good write. so deserving of the gold trophy that you have earned. thank you for sharing this with me today and i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. viyanna rosemarie
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whoa. that's a strong write.
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Chillingly good write... and now.. I am craving pomegranate. Thanks alot.
Excellent take on the prompt! I really enjoyed this one, the emotion was dripping off of it. Thankyou entering my contest, and Good Luck!
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