frequent
peanut butter milkshake
sips, hiding between
book shelves -
the store lights
are too loud
but we
create each other
soft and smoothed-over;
I am nestled into you.
warm breath, against
my hair; books release
all of their little words,
stitching us together
A contest entry
- Anything & Everything Prewrites are ALLOWED! by Sheilasbabygal4life.
400 points, ends December 17, 115 entries
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You are indeed a good poet little missy!
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I felt the need to post again.
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despite this being an excellently written poem, what amazes me is your age of 18. Gives me hope that poetry does have a future.
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wow. that ending is breathtaking. this is beautiful.
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i love the ending. it makes my heart sink.
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Fairly swanky. Good images but I think the flow could be a little better.
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quiet little intimacies that no one ever knows. I dig.
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um, the second stanza might be the coolest thing i've ever seen in my life.
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Excellent.
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This is a really cool poem. I am guessing you have a love of books. reading a good book makes me happy too. I enjoyed the read!!! Thank you for entering my contest.
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I really, really like this one. don't know why...
'I am nestled into you.'
love that. just so adorable. :]
great job.
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mmmm...I could almost taste the peanut butter :] Amazing!
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Very interesting
This brought a smile and it gave me thoughts of poetry and maybe I am wrong
but companionship too
Best wishes and thank you
Julie -
Brilliant penning
A stunning write
Uniquely expressive
A poetic delight !
Best wishes & hugs , friend Easy
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very cute...and somehow smooth. it makes me feel warm and fuzzy inside when i read this. nice play on words
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A beautiful write. thanks so much for entering.
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This is incredible. It's beautiful. I just adore the way you paint images in your words. You're very talented.
Write on.
~*~SP~*~
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Beautiful. It's perfect, I have no criticism, which I don't say often. Very well done. Thanks for entering my contest.
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EXCELLENT WRITE
Sheer beauty in this piece, I loved the last stanza. beautifuly done my friend and elligent indeed. May your pen write on. Peace be with you
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this is so cute, even though the thought of a peanut butter milkshake is so gross to me. haha i hate peanut butter. that's just personal weirdness though.
this is beautiful, as is everything you write.
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"I am nestled into you."
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This is stunning. I love how you put so much into so little space; it's beautiful. My favourite lines:
"the store lights
are too loud"
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this must be the sweetest piece of poetry. simply beautiful...
the store lights
are too loud
but we
create each other
soft and smoothed-over
you are brilliant. missed your writing...i haven't been on ap for the longest time. sorry dear.
-checky
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peanut butter milkshakes?
that sounds really cool. :]
"the store lights
are too loud
but we
create each other
soft and smoothed-over;"
that is is beautiful.
beautiful.
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interresting, peanutbutter milkshakes are my favorite even though i have to make it myself cuz nobody serves it like that. ^_^ You use your descriptions short and sweet, but very much to the point. I like that. The title, I don't quite understand but i'm sure it makes sense to you.
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peanut butter milkshake
-ohohohh, that sounds sooo nice. i love peanut butter everything!! mmn..
the store lights
are too loud
-the is a brilliant, brilliant description. your poetry had emotion and that emotion is so strong.
books release
all of their little words,
stitching us together
-i want to swallow these words and feel them drip down my throat, one by one. they are magnificent.
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i love bookshops
and i love this (:
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