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Chaulk Lines (span/engl)

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En un principio nos amamos,

y lo escribimos en pizarras
con la fecha, y en libros,
y en la corteza de varios arboles
del vecindario.

Me acuerdo el tiempo cuando
nos agarraron, y forzadamente nos mandaron
a quitar nuestras siglas del pared
en el parque. ¿Te acuerdas?
Si, solo para encontrarlas escrito
de nuevo la mañana siguiente en
el mismo lugar.


¡Como vuela el tiempo, Mercedes!
¿Aún Te quiero, sabes?

¡Escribate ésto!

¡Escribate ésto vieja mia!

 

¡ A-ú-n...T-e... Q-u-i-e-r-o !

 

¡Asi es!

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

We loved at the beginning

and we wrote it on blackboards

with the dates, and in books, and on the tree-trunks

throughout our neighborhood.

 

I remember the time when we 

were caught, and they forced us to 

remove our initials from the wall

in the park. Do you remember?

Yes, you're right, only to find them again

the following morning, right

where they were before.

 

How time flies, Mercedes!

 

"I still love you, you know?"

"Write that old girl!"

 

Hurry... hurry!

 

"I... S-T-I-L-L... L-O-V-E...Y-O-U"

Yes, that's it!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Cherry Waves gold member
    10 hours ago
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    Poema maravillosa!


    • adios muchachos gold member
      9 hours ago
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      Thanks for your note, CW

      ...I'm happy you liked my poem.

      I lived in NYC for about 35 years and have been in Las Vegas since then.
      Welcome to AP! I have found it to be more conducive for poetry writing than some other major sites. Hope you have fun here and make a few friends as well!

      John-Nevada

      • Cherry Waves gold member
        9 hours ago
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        No problem, I thought it'd be fitting to comment in Spanish, haha. I've never been to NYC although I'd love to, I live in Rochester which I'm sure you've heard of. And thank you, I really like this site so far.


  • LdyBrknWing gold member
    November 7

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    What a great idea, John; to have both versions of the poem here. One of my goals, before I die, is to learn Spanish. (I hear Rosetta Stone is great...I've gotta' check it out.) My problem is, I have trouble with my Mother Tongue; I slaughter it on a daily basis. Anyhoo...this was a wonderful poem; sweet and nostalgic. The picture you selected for the background lent a wonderful feel to the poem, as well. Very fitting. Oh, to be that young again, but to have the knowledge we've aquired since. Great work, as always, my friend.




    • adios muchachos gold member
      November 8
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      Thanks a lot Paula

      I had better get writing some more of these quick before i forget my Spanish vocabulary!
      Glad you liked this. I think I did hear that Rosetta Stone was good, but eating tacos every day at a fast food stand is better, although fattening!LOL
      When you get that under way let me know and we'll chat in Spanish. The more you immerse yourself into it the better.

      Thanks again,
      John


  • Melanie Garcia
    October 28
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    oh man that is a good poem i read the spanish n english i believe it is a good poem

    • adios muchachos gold member
      October 28
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      Thanks a lot Melanie

      Thanks for your note on my poem! I'm glad you were also able to read the Spanish and
      English versions of this.
      You made my day with your thoughtful message!

      John-Nevada


  • Rose Angel gold member
    October 23

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    John, such a moving poem...Young love....How seldom this is highlighted in a poem...Also your Spanish is excellent, and I enjoy it first in Spanish...I do not know he language well, but I see Portuguese has been in the commen boxes below as well...Bravo for the write!

    • adios muchachos gold member
      October 23
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      Thank you Rose

      How are you? Been a while!
      Have you heard from David in San Diego? Looks like he's not been here for a while.
      I haven't written for a while but I've been reading others now and then.
      Thanks for taking a look at this. One of the few I didn't set rhyme to.

      Take care and thanks again.

      John


  • Andre ben-YEHU
    October 19

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    Maravilloso... Me encantó!


    A beautiful whispering of sublime emotions... "Chaulk Lines (span/engl)" sings lovely memories.

    In respect and admiration,

    Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU
    <><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><> P.S.:
    The language Ms Camargo (The comment before mine) used was Portuguese. It is the translation of the first stanza of Your poem. The fourth line there is Spanish.


  • Tania M Camargo
    October 16

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    No princípio nos amamos.
    E escrevemos sobre as ardósias com data e em livro
    das cascas de várias árvores da vizinhança.
    El tiempo pasa y vamonos poniendo
    viejos - Mercedes Sosa.

    Congratulations!

    • adios muchachos gold member
      October 16
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      Tania

      No se si entiendo o no entiendo su comentario sobre este debido al hecho que lo escribiste en el Portugues o el Italiano.
      De todos modos, te agradezco su interes en este poema.

      John Johnson


  • heart shaped box
    September 30

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    simply put,great job indeed.
    those are the memories we should cherish for now and ever.
    good job as always.

    • adios muchachos gold member
      September 30
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      Hey Brant!

      Damn! You get any taller and I'll have to buy a photo shop program to stretch and crop your picture! How have you been? And Jess? Hope all is well.
      Glad you liked this poem and thanks for your note. Be good, study hard!

      You bud,
      John


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    September 25

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    Remember how I said (elsewhere) that I had encountered non-formal poetry that was elegiac and that worked? Congratulations, this works in two languages. Me gusta mucho.


  • foreheadofgod
    September 22

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    beautiful and sweet i loved it and i love your style its like story time to me i really liked it a lot.,,,,plz check out my one attempt at a sweet poem and leave notes cuz i really like your style a lot! thanks.

    • adios muchachos gold member
      September 22
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      Thanks for the read!

      I'd be happy to look at the poem but which one, what is the title?LOL

      Anyways, thanks a lot for your note.

      John


  • DogFish silver member
    September 20
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    So simple, charming and touching...well done!

    • adios muchachos gold member
      September 20
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      Thanks D F

      Don't know how you found this but THANKS. Hope to write more split language pieces.
      Went to your page and read that Bluebird poem, loved it. Will have to come over and see what you do as well.
      Thanks again.

      John


  • lil lette
    August 31

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    nice job. A mi me gusta. this is a really good piece i like how you wrote in spanish then in english nice job. it is a really good piece and iwould change nothing! buen hecho

    • adios muchachos gold member
      August 31
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      Thanks a lot for your note on my poem.

      I'm glad you liked it! I haven't written many in Spanish but hope to one day as my
      Spanish improves.

      Thanks again, made my day!

  • adios muchachos gold member
    August 23
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    Thanks Tony

    Exactly how many lives do you have anyway? One week and "He's gone", and the next
    week there he is again! That is, unless you have a sort of proxy looking after things until your next resurrection! LOL

    Glad to hear from you, Tony!

    John


  • Titus gold member
    August 23

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    After the first three lines, I was suddenly brought into the poem like water absorbed. This has such a tender feel I'm almost awestruck by it. Lovely work.


  • xxBlack Dawnxx
    August 20

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    this would make a beautiful story for a book

    • adios muchachos gold member
      August 20
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      Thanks for your kind note on this poem.

      Re: book

      I probably AM plagiarizing some book, somewhere.LOL It is an all too familiar theme
      not to be. I appreciate your taking a look at it, and am glad you liked it.

      Thanks again!

      John-Nevada USA


  • jellylovesbob
    August 13
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    Wow

    Amazingly good love it

  • You are sooooo testarudo!

    Hi poet:

     

    This piece is really an awesome piece,

    and full of love, in both Spanish and in English.

     

    Keep on penning poet, one day it will all be worthwhile!

     

    Blessed be,

    your friend,

    AngelicMistress...Tanya

     

    PS

    it is spelled "chalk" not CHAULK!

     

     

     

  • tessa poetry
    July 24
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    you got a lot of hits on this poem it also reminds me of writing my initials in the cement.

  • tessa poetry
    July 24

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    This is a good story talking of an old love together. Applause from me on how the two still stayed together and loved after so many years.


  • indigent
    July 21
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    i also remember the past its a good feeling especially if you put it to words that endear.

    • Thanks a lot...

      ...for your nice note on my poem. I appreciate it!

      Regards,
      John-Nevada


  • condor gold member
    June 27

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    Yes!!! Just sensational! You have done credit to yourself here with this beautiful memorable piece. What visions you have planted in my mind. When I was a kid, we had a lovely stream that ran behind the home and here, we carved our initials in the rocks along its edge. This is really a frolic back in time i guess for many who read this. Sorry you are still having computer problems. Do you want to borrow my 12 gauge? lol! Thanks for the great read.

    • Thanks Condor

      Maybe I should take up painting; no, maybe not!
      I'm scheduled to go on the internet on July 6th. They have to send me a modem in the mails.
      About that pic, I found this program on here called "paint" and you can transfer it to your poems if you want. Bad thing is, it is impossible to draw a straight line using the cursor.LOL
      Have to do something with my time so maybe I'll try another poem in a bit.
      Glad you liked this. Talk to you soon.

      John

      • condor gold member
        July 25
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        I like the picture. Have you seen what is in the Art galleries these days? lol! I use paint a lot but you are right, you cannot draw a straight line. But that doesn't matter because in nature, there are no straight lines. That is a man made thing.

  • Wow! That little picture is so disturbing! Where did you get it?

    • M

      Re: picture

      I found myself in the PAINT area on windows and was fooling around with it for the first time. It was supposed to be a man and woman at the shore but the pic didn't cross-load as it wwas in the PAINT area. Pretty primitive, like fingerpaintingk but
      I lost all my photos and things when I restored my pc.
      Take a look now, it probably is less disturbing!LOL

      John


  • arafura gold member
    June 25
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    Excellent! Great work poet!

    • Thanks John

      It's a little underdeveloped, but that makes two of us! Been months, I think, since I tried anything.
      But thanks for your prima facie vote of confidence/encouragement.
      Hope you are well.

      John

  • Yes, that's it.

    This is lovely - it recalls the need to let the world know of love, how it is impossibly perfect the first time, and each time is the first time. And how time flies! Is time an angel or an eagle, a predator? You forced a new poem from me today, John.

    • Thanks M!

      Thanks for your reading this. Glad you liked it. My first post-hibernation poem!
      Hope you are well.
      John


  • wwfhrocks14
    June 23

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    this is sweet. there's a tree in my town where we all write our intials. brouht back good memories of first love. i likes the spanish too, because i understood most of it.

    • Hello Roxy

      Glad you liked this as I haven't done anything in a long time.
      Nice surprise to hear from you. Hope all is well. I imagine you are on vecation now.
      Have a good Summer!

      John


      • wwfhrocks14
        June 23
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        school endw thursday, i cannot wait. and then next tuesday i'll be in france for 8 days. can't wait.


  • albymyheart gold member
    June 23

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    You really capture the spirit of young love with this remeniscence. Etching, carving, painting the new bond of love, shouting it to the world for all to see. Then what pleasure we find in the ending when we see the heart still young while in the twilight of life. A heart warming write to put you in good spirits. (I'm glad you wrote an English version. ) Alby

    • Hi Alby

      Thanks! Lots of mistakes in this, I typed it real fast at a coffee shop because I have no internet at present.
      Thanks for your note, made my day!

      John


  • Cup-a-Joe
    June 23
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    Holo Amigo,

    That's about all the spanish I know. So ill just say this is mucho good.
    Joe

    • Hola Compadre

      Thanks for looking at this , Joe! Glad you liked this. Needs a bit of looking at because I was in a mad rush to get it down on the site. Got pc problems at present.

      Thanks again, Joe!

      John


  • csmmoms2
    June 23

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    Hay un árbol en el Condado de Rainbow. No tiene límites de espacio ni de tiempo. Es un árbol de la magia. Dos amantes del tallado de lo que debemos hacer. El árbol sigue ahí. La corteza se ha desvanecido las cartas, pero todavía se pueden leer. Ambos son ahora, pero algo pasado persiste.
    -c

    • Hola Carlito

      Que sosrpresa mas grande al ver su misiva escrito en Espanol. Que bonita idioma,
      verdad?
      It appears there are trees like that, and couples like that everywhere.
      Nice to hear from you, Chuck. Hope all is well with you.

      Thanks again!

      John

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