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dream

dreams do funny things to me
they take me to planes of existence where
i can't see
there's no light where my sleeping mind
goes mining for a meaning
in the epitaph of time
and every now and then
when we're digging certain lodes
you can feel the distant rumblings
of a dream deferred explode

and the thing that hurts the most
is when my tiny little dreams
can't grow big and strong and tall
because i have no dreams at all.

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  • Luckybuddy
    September 20

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    GoOd JoB

    well being human beings , its a natural fact that we all guys have some dreams but the thing which hurts is when they don`t come true. But any ways we should always try to make our dreams come true. This poem is great. good job


    Stay happy

    Lucky.


    • ReachingForStars
      September 20
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      Very true. This, when written, was just my way of wondering why I never remember my dreams, but then it became something more metaphorical. Amazing how poetry does that sometimes.
      Thanks for reading and commenting =]
      -K


  • Sheilasbabygal4life gold member
    September 12

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    Nicely written. Short and to the point about dreams. Thanks for entering and best of luck to you in the contest!


  • DesolatELifE
    July 17

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    Dreams.. the ones when I sleep and the ones when I don't. They're all the same to me. Irrelevant. Nice poem.


  • Lowell Poe
    July 12

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    Just a great piece of art lass...
    Had a quiet resignation..
    acceptance with a beat....
    excellent lead in....

    ....Dreams do funny things to me...

    You gave yourself a wide
    opened field with that,
    and made the very most of it ...
    the end hit ya like a
    cork screw to the heart....

    Very well done
    little gypsy,
    you should be
    proud of this,
    Liam


    • ReachingForStars
      July 12
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      Thank you. I really appreciate such a genuinely thought-out comment. And it tickled my Scottish ancestry to be called a "lass"
      Kelly


  • SpydurPoet gold member
    July 12

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    Wow. This was brilliant. Forlorn and beautiful. What a fantastic poem. The last stanza was a perfect ending, as well.
    Write on.
    ~*~SP~*~


  • XxXNoxiousRoseXxX
    July 7

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    This is really deep. However, much more powerful if the video is watched. I love your imagery and wording.

  • Blackrabbit
    June 23

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    very cool, I love it when you rhyme. lol what does hgwabavbilwerhdvsdbnv mean?
    I love this part: "when we're mining certain lodes
    you can feel the distant rumblings
    of a dream deferred explode" Good job

    Uncle Rabbit


    • ReachingForStars
      June 23
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      thanks Unc and "hgwabavbilwerhdvsdbnv" is Kellyish for "Zfucked if I know what to write in this little box" lol.

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