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shall I stir
the metaphorical goo
and wax poetic...?
when I arrive,
will it be 'flight', 'fantasy',
'fling', or 'forever'...?
no one in their right mind
can wax poetic 100% of the time...
or is it that great poets
are completely out of their minds?
I haven't
even told her yet...
I think some alliterative/consonance/assonance beautification
is in order just about now...
Bonus Fragment:
God, she can make me miss her;
why is it, that,
what we need most from one another
hurts so much...?
In a list
A contest entry
- fragments. by Ryno.
400 points, ended July 23, 12 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Each fragment separate but they flow in continuity.
Enjoyed reading this immensely.
Good luck in the contest.
Juls
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thanks much...!
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"I think some alliterative/consonance/assonance beautification
is in order just about now..."
-I loved this stanza, it felt so much like how I get at the end of a deeply personal poem, at some point you want the reflection to be a little less haggard no? great entry - good luck
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yes, and then people say, "I liked the raw version better...!" (maybe they can see the real "us" then...) also... (yes, another deep thought) I discovered that a poem does not have to be great to be enjoyed... (amazing, I know!)
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A bonus fragment! I want one!
Isn't it great to get insight into someone's thoughts for a moment, and funny how sometimes we recognise our own, maybe a worry or a hurt, even if it is a "good" hurt, in what we read. You did an excellent job capturing yours.
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thanks...
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My dear, no one can wax it 100% of the time- but you did a good job picking out the 1% of beautiful thoughts <3
And it hurts- because if things don't hurt every now and then Content becomes boredom, beauty- mundane.
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yes, you're right (but I'm still groaning...!)
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