You know I'm tired, Oh, you know I'm sick.
My soul is worn, I can't conform to this same old shit.
I wonder... How do I get myself in...
Intertwined in these predicaments.
Curiosity, has gotten the best of me... once again.
How do I get myself mixed up in?
With these things I know are off limits.
Why do they appeal to me?
The meaning just may run a little more deep.
I've managed to get tangled into another triangle of love.
You would think someone this mangled would of had enough.
But here I am, engulfed up to my neck... gasping for one last breathe.
Maybe all this chaos is my safety net.
I paint these pictures, I pen these songs.
It's the only way i know to cope with my loss.
I miss the smiles, I miss that gentle touch.
But the things I say are never enough.
And I listen, and I hear, and I wait, and I fear.
I try to ignore, I try to push forward.
I try to move on forward...
What did you think
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second to last stanza, second line, last word... should that be loss? Sorry, I am crazy about that stuff! haha! I love the last line of that stanza! Such impatience! The rest of this is great as well! "You would think someone this mangled would of had enough" I love that line!!!! It seems we always go back to what hurts us. Oh, hell, I could go through line by line, but, I love it all, ok!! Great job, as always from you!
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i believe that this poem is simply, fantastic. every word of it. each line is filled with such great emotion. and it really touches me. the lines really speak to me, and remind me of myself. everyone could probably relate to this. each person wants to grasp at something they shouldn't. I'd quote a line, but i love them all. the meaning to this poem that you tried to give out to the reader, is completely understood. fantastic job you did. keep on writing!
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Wow this is a really good song/poem....
I really really really like it....
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Thanks, Doll... I'm glad you liked it
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Oh My God, this is so good. I can relate to how you feel. My fav part was the last two paragraphs. This is so real and "raw". Keep up the great work and keep writing!!
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Thank Youuu
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these lines are great and I could picture
them sang, great rymhe too, keep them coming!!
one day you will be famous
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love and blessings
Rend
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Hah... Wouldn't that be nice Thanks for the feedback
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Great!
As always your a really great writer. you seem to get your point across everytime. Your words make it feel like i'm in the skin of the person writng this. I can feel every painful word that was writtn across the pages.
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Thanks, Doll!!
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This was a nicely written piece you have here. I enjoyed reading this. had a good flow too it. Very well written. Keep up the amazing work.
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Thanks foe the comments... I appreciate it
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hey
that was great but every body has put them self's in a spot that is not allways a good one even me a 15 year old girl can get meself in a spot like that in fact i have put myself in that spot i know that its not fun but you can get throught it
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This is really sweet, I love it! It is inspiring in its honesty and simplicity.
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wow thats good
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