I open my mind and they slap my hand. Like everything I say is gibberish.
Help me when I ask for help. Because I'll never ask.
Make sense of a perfectly screwed up life.
Make the good bad and bad good.
Taking this tormented mind from my skull
would be better than enduring your brainwashing.
I've broken lose from my molded figure to be
and I've become a lost one.
a lost one of many.
Where do I go to escape this?
when I'm surrounded by distractions and destruction.
who do I turn to?
When not one fucking person can get into my head.
nobody wants to hear this shit.
nobody wants to even THINK about it...
but I can't stop thinking about it...
It's become a creature inside me
screaming so loud
screaming so hard
that you learn to drown it out.
I can only calm my voice
to escape the drama..
I don't want to carry on this horrid fate that runs thick in my blood.
manipulation. deception. who are you!?
no, it's not me. It will never be me.
I will live everyday with that fucking creature inside my head
but it will never be heard. Never be seen. Never touched.
and I will live a happy life.
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this speaks of trouble and trials that only you know of! my heart goes out to you in this moment of need for love and understanding...you have expressed yourself well here. I hope that you get all the answers you are looking for...peace and light, Kendal
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i love it.
its very deep,your a good writer
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Powerful
This is a very deep and emotional poem. I think you captured so much in this piece. Anger, pain, anguish, all presented here so raw and powerfully. This write is very complex write with wonderfully vivid imagery and great symbolism. Every line draws you deeper into the piece and refuses to let you go, even after you finish reading. I think you did an excellent job here. Keep up the great work. -
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Everybody seems to think the same thing about this poem. Thanks for your input! =]
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captivating
This is a very complex piece, so full of emotion, its difficult to seperate them all. Its a great write, deep and powerful with lots of symbolism and imagry, Great flow,and rythem, good structure. It draws you in immediatly, I love that. Each line forcing you to read on... brilliant, thats how it should be. Great write! You have chosen a good background too, its amazing how the subject of the poem can be so well accented by the background, giving its imagry and emotion greater depth, a great title also... bravo!
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^.^ thanks for the input! I'm glad you liked it.
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very intense. i could read it and feel the emotion you were putting in. i would suggest that you seperate some of your ideas to make it easier to read. keep writing.
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