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Locked In A Cage

Locked in a cage, I feel the rage
The torment inside, shall not be denied
Hidden secrets, live with in a nest of hornets

Shattered and battered, a tormented hearts revenge
Broken dreams, unanswered promises
Keep this heart in chains, with little hope of change

Is this is what to be, in due time all will be told
The story shall unfold and the pain deepens
From all the lies told, a deep anger grips
The key to the cage, it holds!

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SheWolfNLust

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  • KaylaSHIKARI
    September 3
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    I liked the message of this piece.
    loved it.
    good luck in my contest<3


  • Desire gold member
    June 26

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    Thank You!

    Thank You for Your entry: Locked In A Cage
    This piece tugged hard at Spirit and after reading several times ~
    I'm Honored also Humbled You took the time to pen for my contest
    You took the prompt and brought forth much for the Mind to feast upon~
    Bravo!! When I digest words written, images come through that grab hard~
    Woven Strengths: The torment inside, shall not be denied
    Wow- now when I read this line- I kept being shown like the battle scars of war-
    and reference to Cold War- Vietnam War etc- it is like this feeling of when the Soldiers come home- the post traumatic stress disorder some suffer from- gets ignored or misdiagnosed- they are tormented- certain sounds of words are a
    catalyst for nightmares also daymares- [what I call it] I am being shown reference to movie based on book: Flowers in the Attic Also another movie I have not seen in its entirety but shown word and snippets- which has *doppelgangers*- and scene set in Russia- based on twins- male and female- I believe it is The Abandoned~ Now re: reference to *hornets* I am shown an episode of Dr. Who I believe and this HUGE insect- but it was this lady's son which she was not aware was her son- he was half human and half outer worldly apparently And line: Keep this heart in chains- For some reason I am shown Joan Jett and the Blackhearts- Crimson and Clover Adore the direction You took with this prompt
    Hopefully my comment to Your write makes sense
    Powerful verse and message You have brought forth

    These words grabbed and pulled~
    Shattered and battered, a tormented hearts revenge
    Broken dreams, unanswered promises
    Keep this heart in chains, with little hope of change
    Vivid Imagery poured in these lines...

    Thank You for sharing Your Talent also Voice
    also best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    Many blessings too
    with much love and light~ Desire~*~


    • SheWolfNLust silver member
      July 4
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      ty very much for you kind words, I am so happy you enjoyed reading my poem and it means a lot to me that you took the time to read over my poem and concider it in the contest you held, just you noticing it is enough for me, I enjoye very much your contest and hope to find more just like it, the picture prompt was a great inspiration and it made it so easy for the words to flow
      In closing I wish you a great 4th of July and a blessed day xoxo