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Heart Of Stone

A self-committed prisoner, inside this heart of stone
In slaved safely inside, allowing no one to see within
Inner feelings of sadness, locked deep inside my heart
Which leaves this empty space inside my soul
With in it I feel alone

It is the place that I go, when all I want to do is hide
Far away from the sight, of ones naked eye
I am finding hard to climb, from this darkened hole
Left inside, from all the heart-break it has sustained
And in realality, I surely don't like being alone

Often I find my self at war, with myself and my desires
But deep walls of stone, serve to protect this heart of mine
They guard against all, with intension's of harm
A self recluse locked inside myself
Scared and abused I feel alone

Leaving little hope of trust, to allow love in once more
All that remains are chains that tightly bind and hold
I often wonder if there will always be,
This empty heart of stone, locked within my soul
Or will someday love set me free?

Written by
Debbie Altiparmakis

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  • seay49 gold member
    June 22
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    needs work

    Hi Debbie,

    I think you need to decide what you want each stanza to say, and then work the words to make it say that. you might want your stanzas to say;
    1 where you are
    2 why you are there
    3 how you feel
    4 how you might escape

    give this a try and let me know if i can help you anymore. -jeff