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Ten mosquito bites

I am looking on my hand
And I see ten mosquito bites
I remember their pain late last night
And I remember the pillow fights
I remember the light went down
And it was time for me to sleep
Wasn’t for long before the ten bites
Had started with the twentieth sheep
I opened my eyes and looked around
There was no one but me in bed
I felt so alone and cold inside
And the tears of pain I shed
My friend the time away
Are the ten mosquito bites
But it would finally change today
To just a memory of pain and fights

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