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~ "Ways of a Fool" ~

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~ "The ways of a fool, delight themselves trammeled amid closed eyes. ~

 

 

~ Believing what is seen in view of them alone is then the only view ... desire. ~

 

 

~ One that only they themselves can trust, in earnest". ~

 

 

~ "Honest Open Willing hearts abide able, lead them knowing this. ~

 

 

~ Are lead themselves by and through the tender eyes of grace. ~

 

 

~ Mercy elightened illuminated high upon their gape". ~

 

 

~ "No more, contempt abides amid indifference"! ~

 

 

~ Peace e're aware of this truth ... evermore aboundant ... is the eminent beauty that Reigns" ... ! ~

 

 

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Author notes

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Qwerty


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~ e v e r y o n e 1 ~


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Option 1: Like the fool, the wise man too must die – Ecclesiastes 2:16

Option 2: Pity the man who falls and has no one to help him up – Ecclesiastes 4:10

Option 3: It is better to vow than to make a vow and not fulfill it – Ecclesiastes 5:5


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~ All three "quotes" I believe encompassed this "qoute". ~


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  • Dryad Enya
    June 25

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    Apart from leaving my breath taken this is raw and emotional i think perhaps you could use more iliterate language other wise it's pretty close to perfect.

    Well done and good luck,
    Gorecki


  • isaacokumu gold member
    June 24
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    good write, good luck in the contest, thanks for entering


  • Dragonbabyx3
    June 23

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    I did enjoy your collection of quotes here. Although, I must say it was a bit difficult to read, with it being so big. Other than that, a wonderful write. Good Luck and Thankyou for entering my contest!


  • ladybug.
    June 23

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    I really enjoyed reading this. My favourite part was:

    "~ "Honest Open Willing hearts able lead them knowing this. ~
    ~ Are lead themselves by and through the tender eyes of grace. ~"

    Thank you for sharing ♥


  • spiritraven
    June 22
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    Well done

    A joy to read....thank you for entering my contest


  • ml12
    June 22

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    I didn't even know that we could write that big. Anyway, I thought that your words and ideas were profound and warming. I also found that the words rolled off my tongue effortlessly and I want to thank you for your entry. Cheers.

  • baghdaelf
    June 22

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    Interesting piece. Beautiful words - but a bit hard to follow -- for me anyway. Keep up the writing!

  • JM Kenyon silver member
    June 22

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    These are lovely words (very large though ). Each stanza has a message and is simply written and that is appealing.

    Still, I prefer introspective poetry over extrospective poetry and this is very extrospective. I think it would have a much greater impact if it probed deeper into the individual that you are, baring your weaknesses and patching them with the strength of your faith.

    Instead, it came across as more "preachy", which isn't a bad thing in another light, after all, to be Christian is, in a way, to be enlisted as a teacher of The Way...

    it's just not what I seek in this contest. I am seeking those little imperfections of mankind that make us different from God Himself, those things that we need to recognize in us and fix in our quest to be closer to Him.

    s ~Genie~

  • SandraMVeinot
    June 22

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    Puts ones mind to work of the willing.
    Psalms 14;1
    Psalms 53;1
    Psalms 75;4
    Psalms 5;5
    Psalms 39;8
    Psalms 92;6
    Psalms 74;18
    Psalms 107;17

    For Salvation comes to the willing in mind.
    For we know there must be first a willing mind.~
    Thank you for the read today.

    and may you have a lovely day too.


  • individuality gold member
    June 22

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    are we not all fools? running around trying to shout our mad opinions to the world around us - a good poem.

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