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Acid Rain

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Acid Rain 

 

Apocalyptic wars have caused decay
Corruption has destroyed the world we knew
Inoculations kept disease at bay
Destroying flesh as radiation grew
Relentless men have caused this disarray
A scorching sun replaced the skies of blue
In vain we try to stay within the shadows
Now that rain feels more like poison arrows

Absorbing toxins now are common place
Children eat the caustic foods we feed them
Ironically they’re gone without a trace
Daily doses from an unknown cell stem
Relentless fools destroyed the human race
Abandoned buildings that we now condemn
Identified by what we have destroyed
No place upon this Earth may be enjoyed

 

 

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  • Have left the stage gold member
    July 15

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    wonderful observations, putting human damage in contrast to nature I suppsoe worthy of each others passing now and again to obliterate everything. I think I am not far wrong. Nicely written, wonderful in fact!


  • Andre ben-YEHU
    June 30
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    Magnificent...


    Blessed are those that see how things affect our planet; and take stand to alert on the wrongdoing to our Earth.

    I enjoy to read acrostic, but when it is written in major art ~ like "Acid Rain" it is a pleasing gift; a true Olympian ambrosia, no matter the subject dealt.

    I have learned from the contents of "Acid Rain".

    In respect and admiration,

    Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU


  • nordicsky silver member
    June 27

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    I read this poem, as I read all your poems.

    This time your imagery scared me.

    Love, Peter


  • PerVirtuous
    June 24
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    A caustic acrostic! I love it. Have three more mutating bunnies.

  • Purrsanthema
    June 23
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    Beautiful and sadly true! We fools seem to destroy all we touch.


  • SteveS gold member
    June 22
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    Super Amera! Such good word usage to follow the context of your write in acrostic form. Great!


  • Pure Thought silver member
    June 22
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    SADly too true

    Wonderfully written.


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    June 22

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    The Queen of Dark is at it again ... excellent. A brilliant poem with a worthwhile message.

    Love
    Sue


  • Discoveria
    June 22

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    I love the images you painted in the first stanza - it reminds me of another portrayal of the apocalypse I've seen, in the game Fallout 3. As jeff says, the acrostic was unobtrusive - I barely noticed until after reading


  • DesolatELifE
    June 22
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    I like the ending very much.

  • Papagallo
    June 22

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    This is another brilliant write, The message in your verse is very scary. Good luck in the contest,


  • cricketjeff gold member
    June 22

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    That is DARK!

    Ottava done with brilliance, of course, the acrostic is unobtrusive, as it should be, and the message fits the content.

    Superb stuff

    Jeff


  • pranj
    June 22

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    WOW! You have taken the prompt in a most unexpected way, and reading the title its impossible to guess as to what the poem might be about...
    your words are as usual captivating...


  • Cup-a-Joe
    June 22

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    Ok I can see it now. You have described the year 2035.
    Very nice take on the pic.

    Joe


  • penman gold member
    June 22

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    excellent

    Such a masterful use of the form. Always so well worded and skillfully done. Best of luck in the contest.

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