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Lights Over Catalina

She told me life was like a window
Outside some days it would rain
And other days the sun might shine
I never thought to really ask her
What it was I had on my mind

So how was I to tell her?
What in hell could I ever say?
Tried to call her all weekend
From here down in Catalina Bay

She said she fancied herself a player
Playing games she said was her forte
No matter what I said could ever sway her
I guess she was never mine anyway

So I chucked my role in as a part time cleaner
And tried to get myself another job
I was losing more than my self respect
So I stole a gun but I couldn't rob

So how was I to tell her?
What in hell could I ever say?
Tried to call her all weekend
From here down in Catalina Bay




Author notes

AP Name: m y r i a d - d a r k

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  • Antebellum
    July 19
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    excellent word choice.
    thanks so much for taking the time to enter.
    good luck


  • dying inside 4ever
    June 30

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    what the hell can I say? All i can say is that i love this poem! good job. great word choice. Great poem. Good luck and srry i cant appuld no points.

  • Antebellum
    June 24

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    So how was I to tell her?
    What in hell could I ever say?
    Tried to call her all weekend
    From here down in Catalina Bay"


    this was stunning. Loved the word choice, and the ryme.
    thanks for entering- best of luck.


  • waydownuponjoy
    June 22

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    I'm so taken ...

    and opt to review your poem before reading the entry requirements as that might just spoil the space that your words took me to! Interestingly enough I did have an emotional response as I lingered between the metahoric highs & lows. It was an effective use of the title and you tied that thought in well at the end. joy