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Walk softly in dawn’s first glow

Like autumn leaves that drift to earth,
Winter’s first snow upon sleeping grass,
Bee that lights on rose’s face,
Walk softly in dawn’s first glow.

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  • Lavender Butterfly silver member
    June 22
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    this is so lovely... x


  • Terry-too silver member
    June 22

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    Lovely

    It took me there, gently.
    A scene well known,
    yet as new as the new snowflakes,
    with new eyes. Peace.

    Terry


  • toomysterious
    June 22
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    Soft and gentle vision you present and a sweet peacefulness. Keep up the good work.


  • just mercedes gold member
    June 22

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    Beautiful images of completion and peace, moving into life and a new day. This is a very clever poem, with the internal rhymes and near-rhymes producing a haunting tone. I like it very much.


  • albymyheart gold member
    June 22

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    You have penned a wonderfully appropriate metaphor to simulate thoughts of walking softly in the dawn. And in that metaphor a beautiful image of nature is captured...who could ask for more. Very nice indeed...Alby

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