In odd tramps of thought
still muddied in drifts,
to have stillness and rest;
So the mystic lapsidasily flows
as I watch
staring into the dark waters.
As the wind
rustles through the trees.
Let me know How this makes you feel, what do you think?
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I really enjoyed reading your poem. It is very short and sweet. To have stillness
and rest is very nice, thats almost like a peace and calm. Thank you for sharing andfd it was a pleasure to read -
I think of how dirt turns to mud after the rain
how it changes how we see the earth
maybe a rag on the ground get dirty from rain
this is a great way of describing the passage of time
rain turns a bright day to a gloomy gray sky
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nice write, i enjoyed it very much. Great opening line.
perfect as is, dont let nobody tell different.
thank you for sharing
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beautiful way to pass time. loved the imagery, brother. awesome write.
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Very peaceful and oddly nostalgic for me.
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-In odd tramps of thought-
So superbly unique...one of thee
best opening lines I have read......
-still muddied in drifts-
it moves in an unexplainable dream like....experince.....
the end was just wide open..beautiful......
like a window was opened on a pensive windy day.
You have done it again my brother,
for the love of God don't change anything,
Liam
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Thank you Liam,
no worries I wont change a thing.
glad you like my daydream.
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