Like the butterfly, I am
Captive to the wind
Tossing me about as it will,
Despite how furiously
My wings do flutter.
Like the sparrow, I am
Servant to the clouds
Drawing me to precarious heights,
Despite my feet grasped
Tightly to the branch.
Like the minnow, I am
Slave to the ocean
Its current pulling me deep,
Despite my fins
No match for the undertow.
Like the butterfly, the sparrow, the minnow, I am:
Prisoner chained to flight of fancy.
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Hey, I like this. I like the idea of being attached to nature and having to do what nature tells us to.
With the final stanza, you could say something like:
'I am a sparrow, a butterfly, a minnow,
I follow the chains, on my flight of fancy.'
Ok, don't use that word for word since its not perfect, but that might give you some idea. On the other hand you could leave the stanza alone, I think its fine as it is.
Thanks for sharing.
Catstar -
I am unsure about the last stanza. I'd like some advice on that.
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