We started out as friends, almost 3 years always on the phone.
November fourth, we admitted that we loved each other,
Then we were finally together.
it was also your birthday, and you spent it with me alone.
I'll remember these thing's forever.
We are friendship caught on fire,
You are my only desire.
We are meant to be, a love that's never ending,
You are my reason for living.
Remember when we watched "I walked the line" I'll never forget that night.
Just me and you, you held on to me, you held on tight.
I remember the tear in your eye, when we had our first fight.
We've had a lot more since then, but we always make it out alright.
We are friendship caught on fire,
You are my only desire.
We are meant to be, a love that's never ending,
You are my reason for living.
November fourth, 2006, it was on a Saturday,
10:36pm, I'll never forget, that's when we got together.
That's when true love finally came my way,
Good times or bad, always remember, I'm yours forever.
Author notes
okay yea I know it's corny >_
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We are friendship caught on fire,
You are my only desire.
We are meant to be, a love that's never ending,
You are my reason for living.
Oh my gosh. Such great lyrics!
The rest of the poem was ok, but those lines really stood out. Thanks for entering. -
This was definately good. I like the rhyme and repittition.
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Love the depth of emotion you have in this - and the wonderful memories you made the reader feel.
As far as critique - that would be very hard on a personal write that comes from the heart....
nicely done
thank you for your entry
best wishes in the contest
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Very sweet tribute!
I wish you both all the best always!
I am not fond of the way you broke up the sentences...
but it still reads fairly smoothly...Thanks so much for entering!
Best wishes in the contest and always!
Write on and on!
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I think that this is great very sweet and touching thanks for taking the time to enter and coming out to support our contest best wishes always be well.
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It is only corny to those who have never known real love, how can they understand that feeling until it hits them too? I hope you both always feel the closeness of love. Sheila
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hey, it might be corny but nothings wrong with that...technically if you think about it all love is basically about being corny with someone and it feels good or loooks cute...thank you for telling the story in beautiful poetic form of how you two lovebirds got together...wonderful story! excellent job as always!
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Very beautiful and sweet!
It's a wonderful feeling when you finally
find the one that you love and who loves
you. Lovely work and good luck to you!
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Corny just goes with love though sweetie. This is beautiful and the background is perfect with it. Good luck in the contest.
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Corny and sweet! There's nothing wrong with corny when it comes to love.
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no its sweet
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