In the silver glow of moonlight you are all I want to see,
You are every dark red rosebud, every line of poetry.
When we met, that summer evening, time was halted for a while
And I kissed the stars above us who had given me your smile.
You wore earrings full of starlight and a dress of woven night,
Like a goddess from Olympus you pushed all else from my sight.
There were wisps of silver cloudlets filling spaces in the sky,
In the breeze between the treetops was the sound of nature's sigh;
For she knew she had been bested and the crown was yours to wear,
You were beauty made as woman, there was gold dust in your hair.
In the silver glow of moonlight you are all I want to see,
You are every dark red rosebud, every line of poetry.
Every moment that I've known you I have known that love can grow
And in every word I've written I have put that love on show.
I can taste your tender kisses when you whisper me my name,
If I float across the heavens I will know you are to blame.
When you kissed and called me lover, when you gave me all the world,
I was suddenly immortal and my colours were unfurled.
We can dance until forever under skies of midnight blue
And all I will be thinking is it's me that's here with you.
In the silver glow of moonlight you are all I want to see,
You are every dark red rosebud, every line of poetry.
Please tell me honestly what you think, good or bad.
Comments
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This is beyond amazingly beautiful. I always love your love poems, you're truly gifted at writing them
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Although you have yet to reciprocate, I always enjoy reading and commenting on your beautiful rhyming poems. The perfect use of meter makes this work dance across the page and the repetition of the couplets makes this even more lyrical. While every line was graceful, "You wore earrings full of starlight and a dress of woven night," was my favorite. Peace, Liz
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Enchanting
what a beautiful piece you've written here. every line is filled with such powerful emotion that just bleeds through your words into the reader's heart. at least this reader. thanks for sharing.
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Beeeeeyoutifull
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lovely meter , subject, etc.
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excellent ....love survivin
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Though I write a few love poems my self. This poem made me go run n make my girlfriend breakfast in bed and buy her orchids (her favorite flowers) to show her much she means to me...That's what a love poem is supposed to do right? Made me feel mushy I loved it. Keep up the amazing work.
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Very good Poem
I really enjoyed reading this poem. I think you have a great talent there. I dont find any line in this poem faulty.
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There is only one word that can describe this
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last stanza had no match... really good.
and awesome work
you write such beautiful
I only remember if I read your poems a year ago
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the poet of hearts and beautiful words -
last stanza had no match... really good.
and awesome work
you write such beautiful
I only remember if I read your poems a year ago
by
the poet of hearts and beautiful words -
last stanza had no match... really good.
and awesome work
you write such beautiful
I only remember if I read your poems a year ago
by
the poet of hearts and beautiful words -
last stanza had no match... really good.
and awesome work
you write such beautiful
I only remember if I read your poems a year ago
by
the poet of hearts and beautiful words
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this is beautiful. Why is it that people comment when you feature a poem but they click and pass over mine? Do we not both bleed ... LOL. anyway, your writing is always first class. I want to be you when I grow up.
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You should see how many click and DON'T comment!!!
I'm hoping never to grow up
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i loved it i think it was very beutiful
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this is the kinda poem that makes people slow down and think i love the choice of words
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Its sound pretty but i got bored...
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Beautiful and sensitive.
Magnificent very beautiful, the pictures it generated in my mind while reading this were absolutely wonderful. You made night and lovers come alive with this. If you write these things for your lady she is lucky indeed. A lot of men might feel these things but don't know how to express them. The rhyme was exqusite and I enjoyed it emensely. Very good poem one of the best.
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brilliant it had me in a world my self
and all i could think of is that special someone of my own and how precious and wonderfull she is
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the gossamer light quality and pixie dust magic of this poem can make a reader lose his place in the natural order of things, make even a finned thing feel like flying. the poetry could only be improved by using more 'silver', like love poems, you can never have enough of that. -silverphish
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simply amazing. the best!
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Wonderfully writen
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This Is Great!
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Beautiful
this was a beautiful write. You did a very wonderful job writing this. Keep up your amazing work! I absolutely enjoyed this.
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numbero uno
This is mesmersing-the romance-the beauty of words- the bonita emotions -all of it is breathtaking-your poem effortlessly flowed and in it's wake it swept the reader right off her feet-an excellent poem-words -language- imagery- all numbero uno
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what can i say.....i just had to read the master as they say....so....i have and..well you aint that bad i suppose even though i like a bit of prose..if i wore a hat i would raise it to you...lol..wonder how many here remember that tradition....keep well my mate.....keep happy... and stay true to your traditions...i really do admire your talent and skill....maybe i'm jealous cos i aint got it..if you tell anyone i said that i will spread a rumour that you are really a scouser and a fanatical liverpool supporter...later my mate.....liverpool, liverpool..yer know what i mean la
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Thumbs up :)
This was really good and I loved the rhyme and rhythm that makes it flow like any good relationship should.
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I really enjoy the flow you have.
In the silver glow of moonlight you are all I want to see,
You are every dark red rosebud, every line of poetry.
I can taste your tender kisses when you whisper me my name,
Great lines.
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Man. Ex was right. This really rocks the Casbah. Makes me wanna learn to play guitar so I can play and sing this to my sweetie. I may have to shorten the lines a bit, but it is really good.
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wow! dis is gooood shit!
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Just the sort of poetry I like!
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Not bad. With bunnies!
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You are the master of moon poetry. This is beautiful!
Love,
Amera♥
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Very heartfelt and wonderfully written!!!
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A lovely poem...well written and well use of words. I always love when poems rhyme and you rhyme so well.
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Very Nice Piece of Rhyme
I like your use of refrains and the organization of your thoughts in each line. The imagery is coherent and blends into a tender storyline thats very romantic and goes somewhere compelling.
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Fascinating imagery. You use very active words. It's an absolutely beautiful poem.
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Amazing
i have read other poems that you have written and you never disapoint me, everyone is brilliant, pure genius from begining to end, thanks for sharing x
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Beautiful flow and sentiment with effortless rhyme.
"You wore earrings full of starlight and a dress of woven night"
I loved this line, such excellent imagery. Good luck in the contest.
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This is so so beautiful.
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oh, Jeff. I've never met anyone quite like you. Your talent is immense, your heart more beautiful than the most gorgeous night sky, and quite frankly, you've made my eyes fill with tears with this most lovely poem. Bookmarked for sure.
love, lane
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your poetry is some of the best that i've ever read. i think this one is on the top of all the ones that i have read. the flow is so beautiful. it left a tear in my eye.
Dax
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hmmm I think I will go ahead and comment on this every two lines I think that that will be for the best. I like to comment as I read so that you get the best possible comment.
Stanzas 1 and 2:
I really love what I have read so far it is really fasinating. I like the intelcetual vibe that I have picked up from this. I can tell you have put a lot of very deep thoughts into this. I really think that it is really great so far. I must read on.
Stanzas 3 and 4:
Awe that is so very sweet and so touching what a special woman that you have. You really have made a great work of art here. I can feel your love in every printed word and some in between. Great job thus far reads on...
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AWE!!!!!!!!! Wow that is so unbelievable sweet that is very romantic! I really love what I have seen here. Great job I love what I see here. -
Wow!
I would LOVE someone to write a poem like that for me! The structure reminds me of another poem, and I can't quite bring it to the forefront of my mind. Thinking it might have been a Kipling, but not sure. Excellent though (in my uneducated opinion!).
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Awesome, simply mind blowing!!!!!!!
So romantic and such high imagery and figurative use of language!
It also has refrains giving it a very nice pattern for a song lyrics. It would a wonderful song of love and emotions.
Loved reading this.
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I think everyone underneath me beat me to every comment i could have given you,they are all true,
this work is Beautiful! ~sighs~
Blessings
Rend
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wow, 'You wore earrings full of starlight and a dress of woven night,
Like a goddess from Olympus you pushed all else from my sight.' these were my fave lines in the poem and there were so many lol i thought it was a truly great write and flowed really well, i hope you keep writing such beautiful poetry.
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Wonderfull
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This is a WOW piece shared! Full of imagery and nice feelings that leaves ya with some hope to experience this too in this lifetime.
Awesome!!
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Beautiful poem.
The word "my" at the end of the second verse throws off the rhythm. Other than that, a marvelous piece of romantic art.
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When you kissed and called me lover, when you gave me all the world,
I was suddenly immortal and my colours were unfurled.
We can dance until forever under skies of midnight blue
And all I will be thinking is it's me that's here with you.
In the silver glow of moonlight you are all I want to see,
You are every dark red rosebud, every line of poetry.
Such lovely thoughts, every dark red rosebud, I like that.
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Exactly what I needed to read tonight!
Do you mind if I read it to that special someone?
Ian
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Jeff you are one hell of a poet and this is a very fine read
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I think you've used some imaginative thoughts and presented them eloquently. I have to admit to being bored of love poetry, however, that's my issue.
A good piece but far from an original theme. Treasure the honesty
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Yes ...
this is very nice indeed.
It's perfect for setting to music, and I recommend you have that done soon. I can actually hear Elton John crooning this in my mind while reading it.
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If I knew anyone who could do so, I would
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And I kissed the stars above us who had given me your smile.
You wore earrings full of starlight and a dress of woven night
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This is what poetry should be...so rhythmic it nearly sings itself rather than having to "be read". Great use of meter, language and rhyme. Certainly on of the best I've read here for some time. And the lines:
"In the silver glow of moonlight you are all I want to see,
You are every dark red rosebud, every line of poetry."
are simply priceless.
Excellent job with this one Jeff.
Ruth
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a song to hum!
Honestly...I could hum it all the way from here to home today and sing it to my lady if I could! awesome sentiments and such fine imagery and lyrical genius. Lovely work, refreshing write!
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"I am officially speechless. This was so tender and full of passion. Love is truly a God given thing and you portrayed that so wonderfully in this piece. The repetition of the lines "In the silver glow of moonlight you are all I want to see,
You are every dark red rosebud, every line of poetry." made it song like and it was the sweetest love song I have read in years. Such beautiful words and gorgeous imagery. Kudos on this write!"
I agree whole-heartedly. This is beautiful. And I'm not one for love-poems and such. But this is in a totally different category. The repetition worked well and the rhyme was perfect; it all flowed together like unhindered water. 
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I am officially speechless. This was so tender and full of passion. Love is truly a God given thing and you portrayed that so wonderfully in this piece. The repetition of the lines "In the silver glow of moonlight you are all I want to see,
You are every dark red rosebud, every line of poetry." made it song like and it was the sweetest love song I have read in years. Such beautiful words and gorgeous imagery. Kudos on this write!
Stephanie
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The poem is solid...
These two lines were pure delight:
"You wore earrings full of starlight and a dress of woven night"
"In the breeze between the treetops was the sound of nature's sigh;"
Always enjoy reading your stuff Jeff.
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ho romantic I can tell that you are writting this poem from the heart that is why so many people want to read your wonderful poem.
I hope you win this is the best love poem that I have read all day.
I loved the quote
' And I kissed the stars above us who had given me your smile.
You wore earrings full of starlight and a dress of woven night,'
The quote is perfect to remind yourself of a never ending kiss that you are never going to forger. I can tell that you love is pure as pure can be that is why this quote sets of the poems mood.
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You have a truly loving and beautiful heart, your poetry shows it well. I have truly enjoyed this write.
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I like this, it has a airy feel ... like gliding across the lines. But because of this i feel that it lacks passion, no doubt this is just my way of reading it. It is a beautiful poem and your language is impeccable, but this is a bit sappy for love, though the imagery is PROFOUND.
A good read, i honestly enjoyed it. Thank you.
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That's magic!
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Twice today you have shown me how Rhyme and meter excel; this was a joy to read.
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I loved this poem, the flow, imagery, repetition, left me feeling in awe. MAGNIFICENT!!!
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This is a gorgeous poem I really love the rhythm and the imagery - it was beautiful - I really can't say much more than that otherwise you'd have a comment full of thesaurus entries for "lovely"
Polly
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Hi Jeff, your poem is so beautiful it brought tears to my eyes. I used to dance under the stars, but not anymore. It's nice to read about it though. Continue to write from the beauty in your heart. Good luck in the contest.
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That's beautiful, truly beautiful.
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This poem is the one I was boasting about you to my mom with! It s so beautiful and terribly romantic. My two favorite lines "For she knew she had been bested and the crown was yours to wear, You were beauty made as woman, there was gold dust in your hair." Having gold dust in her hair just makes her sound that much more magical to me! I hope you win
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This flows so beautifully. I love the images and the repetition. The composition was great.
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When it comes to romantic poetry, Englishmen evidently know how to do it best. Your writing reveals the gentleness in your heart, your loved one is very fortunate indeed. I like the repeated line, sweetness between the layers...cake...a slice of romance.
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fantastic imagery used here. So much strength in these words... wow. I am amazed,
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This is such a great poem. The rhyme scheme works so well and the imagery you used was so passionate and precise. I love the metaphors and basically everything about it-props to you!
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Loved it
Sent shivers, It's beautiful!
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Verr stuning and beautiful,
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I don't usually like repetition in poetry, but it was really nice here. It worked well with the rest of the stanzas.
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Oh, this IS wonderful I absolutely loved it! Crazy as it may sound I heard Rex Harrion's voice reading this in my head! Fantastic stuff as usual!!!
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Beautiful and Breathtaking
I love the imagery you used in this poem. I did notice an error, maybe you meant to do it maybe not, its in this line: "I can taste your tender kisses when you whisper ME MY name" (I capitalized the place where the mistake is).
I think my favorite part of the poem is, "You wore earrings full of starlight and a dress of woven night,
Like a goddess from Olympus you pushed all else from my sight.
There were wisps of silver cloudlets filling spaces in the sky,
In the breeze between the treetops was the sound of nature's sigh;
For she knew she had been bested and the crown was yours to wear,
You were beauty made as woman, there was gold dust in your hair."
Great Job Jeff, keep up the amazing work.
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Thank you for the lovely comments,
No the "whisper me my name" is as intended it is intended to say she whispered my name into my ear and I like the sound of me my
Thanks again, I am always very grateful to people who read my poetry that carefully, I do make quite a few mistakes and I would hate for someone to see it and not mention it to me, thank-you.
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I never say things I don't mean. After i said that about that line I realized what you had meant.
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great read. i enjoyed the repeated chorus as it almost made me feel like i was enjoying a sonnet. I could almost see this being a narrative in a love story. Beautiful poetry.
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This was absolutely beautiful, gorgeous, amamzing! I loved all the imagery, all your emotion & love. I am rendered speechless.
What beautiful penning. Thank you for sharing!
exOHex
Brea
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I could use a thousand adjectives to describe your beautiful words, but they seem frivolous in comparison. Instead, I'll just say you touched my heart with this.
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Excellent
A very fine write, indeed. Imagery; rhythm, and rhyme are just fine, as usual, my friend. Thanks for sharing this one with us. -
every dark red rosebud. . .
wow. . .Phantomdreaming has a very good observation - it does remind me of Shakespeare. . .it just makes me sigh and dream. . .(that's usually the case with your romantic poems, Jeff. . . ) I especially loved these lines: "When you kissed and called me lover, when you gave me all the world / I was suddenly immortal and my colours were unfurled." To me they are wonderful. 
Good luck in the contest. 
♠ Lady Elinor
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beautiful
I loved the imagery, the cadence and the rhyming of this poem (it sounds like a sonnet or a song)...its themes reminded me of Shakespeare's ' 'Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?'...Unfortunately I don't think I have enough theoretical knowledge of poetry writing to see and point out any flaws, all I can say is it seems fine and well done to me. So thanks for sharing and good luck for the contest!
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I think this is a beautiful piece. Thanks for sharing it! Best of luck with this contest.
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The use of colour and strong visual imagery throughout this is breathtaking. The refrain lines are pretty powerful too, though for me most of the impact of the poem was concentrated in the verses - I especially liked "You wore earrings full of starlight and a dress of woven night".
The rhymes are great and the meter is regular. One thought I had is that there might be a tendency for long lines of iambic meter to start to accelerate - one of my poems using iambic octameter does this. I guess it depends on how quickly you read and how punctuation is employed.
Nevertheless, a brilliant poem!
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You are becoming a role model to me. This is amazing. Im 14. And my poems look like a children's book compared to your huge classic novel.
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I find this absolutely beautiful and splendid. Very well-executed. You take care.
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What an olde romantic you are Jeff, but with a fresh awe about it, and not too cliche' either. It has the olde school attached without it being too obvious. What a little moonlight can do eh? Lovely read!
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