i have sinned, i have hurt
by doing what i wanna
i need to get what i deserve
which is to die and go to Gehenna
i am selfish, i am greedy
where did i go wrong
i used to be so happy
now my life is a blues song
i could say i am sorry
to all those that i hurt
its not like it will do anything
I'll still feel like dirt
i don't feel like i deserve to live
I'm sure even god himself agrees
if he strikes me down i wont stop him
i must listen to his divine decree
because of who i am
i feel so alone
i cant say i blame them
i shouldn't be condoned
I'm living a nightmare
i know I'm repeating
but Ive decided I'm going to be open
rather than being deceiving
so i guess I'll end this poem
and quit all my complaining
because i bet you don't give a fuck
i bet reading this was straining
how bad is it?
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i agree with immortal! The whole thing was amazing, and then the ending was like...blech. idk, the rest of it was really good. Strong feelings are penned and woven within your words!! Great piece.
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I really like this poem; the idea behind it is wonderful, and the emotion is strong.The only bit I didn't like was the end... It didn't have the same impact that the rest did, since it sounded forced and kinda cheesy. My advice: Never forgo meaning for the sake of being able to rhyme
Well done, & keep it up!
Laura
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you spelled straining wrong.
Great flow, great rhyme, good write Brett. A relatable poem.
xx
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