Blood on this knife, ran it right through,
into this heart I gave to you.
Piercing the empty stains of love you don't know,
bleeding me dry, I have nothing left to show.
Crawl to me with tears in your hand,
describing pictures of a broken man.
Come closer and my nothing you shall see,
closer and closer to the empty in me.
Spilling you out, watching you drain,
filling this void with darkness and pain.
Your apologetic symphony plays to me sweet,
as your dripping down my body, surrounding my feet.
In this bloody river is where you now flow,
out of this heart, I'm watching you go.
Come closer I ask, come closer and see,
this void you left inside of me.
A contest entry
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Dedicated to My Love......
Comments
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Great job capturing the emotion at the time this occured!!
You did a great job capturing the emotions of the person in the poem. I remember all to well when it happened. This was a true learning experience. I think this was a well written poem and you really are a great writer!! Great job!!
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wow dark and beautiful
which song did you choose though?
I love what you did with this
keep the ink flowing
thank you for the entry
fire
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Really Good!
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I loved it, kind of felt like I could relate to it SOMEHOW, just don't know how. -_- , I'm just dense that way, anyway, into the FL it goes =]
- kimie
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Wow, it's very .. Well, different. I haven't seen many poems in this type of form, at least, not in my contests. I love the part that says, ''Spilling you out, watching you drain,
filling this void with darkness and pain.'' It really speaks to me.
Thank you for entering my contest, and good luck. ♥
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